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1. This act shall be cited as the BraveSirRobin Commendation Act.

Recognition
2. The region of Wintreath recognizes the accomplishments, contributions, and services to Wintreath by BraveSirRobin, included but not limited to:
a) Significant contributions as the Third Delegate of Wintreath (and second longest serving delegate) for almost 3 years,
b) Contributions to building the reputation of Wintreath abroad as the Thane of Ambassadors and the development of several ambassador programs,
c) Serving as a Skrifa of the Underhusen, Speaker, and Speaker pro-tempore of the Underhusen for many terms,
d) Significant contributions to the success and the promotion of the yearly summer festival, Summersend, such as the hosting of several regional activities like the "Wintreath Skyscraper,"
e) Serving as an ambassador to several regions that have become our closest allies, such as the North Pacific and Europeia,
f) Significant contributions to Roleplay and Gaming in the region such as the creation of the Deep Space Wintreath game, and his service as RP Guild Councillor for over 3 years,
g) Contributions to official Wintreath publications such as the Orendi, and the spreading of said publication to several allied regions,
h) Significant contributions to the creation, activity, and early in-game infrastructure of Wintreath's official Minecraft server, such as in "Spawn City," and the "ROBIN Corp,"
i) Significant contributions to Wintreath's election system with the establishment of the Robin Steak Fry, which later evolved to the Monarch's Ice Cream Social,
j) Contributions as an early promoter of Potatoism and the Potatoe.

3. The Storting hereby awards BraveSirRobin the Commendation of Wintreath.

This was done unbiased, and I think they are very well deserving!

I would suggest some changes/fixes in the punctuation and style, to make it more consistent with previous commendations. In particular, each lettered clause should end with a comma, except the last one which should end with a period. (Maybe also make the letters lowercase, but I think that's more a preference thing.)

I also have the following content suggestions:

I would suggest adding a mention of Robin's work on the Minecraft server building much of the early in-game infrastructure of the settlement which has since become known as Spawn City, and perhaps also his endeavors and activity creation under ROBIN Corp.

For the RP section, I'd might also mention specifically his loremaster work leading the Deep Space Wintreath game, and perhaps also his early efforts to promote the Potatoe.

For electoral related matters, I may also suggest mentioning his Robin Steak Fry; this influential question and answer format for all candidates later evolved into the Monarch's Ice Cream Social.

Thanks for the suggestions, I will put them in right away.

I would suggest some changes/fixes in the punctuation and style, to make it more consistent with previous commendations. In particular, each lettered clause should end with a comma, except the last one which should end with a period. (Maybe also make the letters lowercase, but I think that's more a preference thing.)

I also have the following content suggestions:

I would suggest adding a mention of Robin's work on the Minecraft server building much of the early in-game infrastructure of the settlement which has since become known as Spawn City, and perhaps also his endeavors and activity creation under ROBIN Corp.

For the RP section, I'd might also mention specifically his loremaster work leading the Deep Space Wintreath game, and perhaps also his early efforts to promote the Potatoe.

For electoral related matters, I may also suggest mentioning his Robin Steak Fry; this influential question and answer format for all candidates later evolved into the Monarch's Ice Cream Social.

I decided to keep them capitalized since thats how all the other commendations were organized.

I'm going to be that guy again, but I would like to see more details in the commendation. When I read it with the mindset of someone who doesn't know BSR, I keep asking myself "significant contributions" like what? I think the suggestions by taulover are a great start, but I think focusing on specifics in general and resisting the urge to generalize would make this a better commendation.

I decided to keep them capitalized since thats how all the other commendations were organized.

The lettered lists are lowercase and wrapped in parentheses in the other commendations.

Thanks for the suggestions, I will put them in right away.

I don't think it's fair to say the BSR contributed to the creation and maintenance of the server. He joined and was most active on the server quite some time after the creation of the server, and did not "maintain" it in the usual sense (he wasn't an op or anything), but he did do important work building early roads, town squares, etc. around spawn and driving activity at some points.

I'm going to be that guy again, but I would like to see more details in the commendation. When I read it with the mindset of someone who doesn't know BSR, I keep asking myself "significant contributions" like what? I think the suggestions by taulover are a great start, but I think focusing on specifics in general and resisting the urge to generalize would make this a better commendation.

A solid point, I actually don't remember what Robin wrote for official publications for instance, I trust that Ogun did the research but it would be good to see specifics and it feels weird without.

I'm going to be that guy again, but I would like to see more details in the commendation. When I read it with the mindset of someone who doesn't know BSR, I keep asking myself "significant contributions" like what? I think the suggestions by taulover are a great start, but I think focusing on specifics in general and resisting the urge to generalize would make this a better commendation.

Thank you for being that guy again 

I decided to keep them capitalized since thats how all the other commendations were organized.

The lettered lists are lowercase and wrapped in parentheses in the other commendations.

Thanks for the suggestions, I will put them in right away.

I don't think it's fair to say the BSR contributed to the creation and maintenance of the server. He joined and was most active on the server quite some time after the creation of the server, and did not "maintain" it in the usual sense (he wasn't an op or anything), but he did do important work building early roads, town squares, etc. around spawn and driving activity at some points.

I'm going to be that guy again, but I would like to see more details in the commendation. When I read it with the mindset of someone who doesn't know BSR, I keep asking myself "significant contributions" like what? I think the suggestions by taulover are a great start, but I think focusing on specifics in general and resisting the urge to generalize would make this a better commendation.

A solid point, I actually don't remember what Robin wrote for official publications for instance, I trust that Ogun did the research but it would be good to see specifics and it feels weird without.

Thank you for the trust, BraveSirRobin did contribute to several publications of the Orendi and as an ambassador he relayed it to our allies in several regions.

Though I'm it would be weird for Tau to talk about his commendation but I would like everyone to also look at that act to see if I missed anything.

@ogunbiyi6422 more factual feedback - BSR didn't create Spawn City ('such as in "Spawn City"' would be far more accurate), and ROBIN CORP is purely a Minecraft thing and probably belongs better there.

Thank you everyone for the feedback! I will wait till the weekend before passing this to the Underhusen floor.