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[DISCUSSION] Chanku Recognitions Act
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    1) This act shall be cited as the Chanku Recognitions Act.

    Recognitions
    2) The Storting recognizes that Chanku was the first Citizen to make Wintreath her original home, and that she has since been a prominent member of Wintreath's forum and IRC/Discord community, where she has contributed to Wintreath's special and freewheeling culture.
    a) Specifically, Chanku has expanded Wintrean culture through the creation of an unofficial Minecraft Tekkit server which has become very popular with the Wintrean community.

    3) The Storting recognizes that Chanku has been an instrumental driver of Wintrean parliamentary and legal culture, particularly through her unparalleled belief in and devotion to the Underhusen as an institution, through such accomplishments as:
    a) Having ran as a candidate for Underhusen in every election since the Storting was established, currently a span lasting over five years and growing.
    b) Having been elected to 16 Underhusen sessions, where the Underhusen placed its faith in her by selecting her as its Speaker for 8 of those sessions and its Speaker Pro Tempore for another 4 of those sessions.
    c) Having represented the Monarchy in parliamentary matters for an additional session as Chairperson of the Overhusen.
    d) Having authored, co-authored, and influenced a number of acts that have passed into law, including the Citizenship and Demonym Act, the Code of Criminal Laws, the Default Seats of the Underhusen Act, and the Procedural Rules Speaker and Officers Amendment.
    e) Having tested the region's legal system by bringing its first lawsuit.

    4) The Storting recognizes that Chanku has also served in many other government roles, including Jarl of Foreign Affairs and Regional Gameplay Advisor. Additionally, she was involved in our regional military, the Hvitt Riddiral, through most of its entire existance, from being a trainee in its first operations to serving as Jarl of Defense for over a year.
    a) In particular, as Jarl of Foreign Affairs, Chanku created the first formal Ministry mandate in Wintreath's history, which reorganized the ministry and in part led to a revival of the ministry and in foreign affairs unseen since the period right after the region was founded.

    5) The Storting recognizes Chanku as a stalwart defender of the region, its community, its principles, and its Monarch in cases where it has been the target of untruths and slander, particularly during:
    a) The events of July 2015, when several prominent Citizens announced their intent to overthrow the Monarchy. Her defense led her to being inappropriately banned by one of the Citizens involved who was also a chat op.
    b) The events of March 2018, when The Versutian Federation closed relations with Wintreath for reasons based on incorrect facts collected through poor research on their part. Her actions, along with those of others, resulted in a restoration of relations.
    c) The events of May-July 2018 during the Lazarus Constitutional Convention, where she often sacrificed her own personal standing among the powers that be in that region in fighting untruths leveled against the region and its Monarch. Her actions in part inspired a renewed regional focus on foreign affairs, which included her own appointment as Regional Gameplay Advisor and later her second appointment as Jarl of Foreign Affairs.

    Commendation
    6) Recognizing these feats as fact, the Storting hereby awards Chanku the Commendation of Wintreath.

    7) Recognizing the lengths Chanku has gone to in order to defend the region and its honour, the Storting additionally grants her the honour title of "Champion of the Just".

    Alright, everyone, I am re-introducing the Chanku Recognitions Act. I feel that a Commendation for and recognition of Chanku is long overdue, personally. I would like the hear the thoughts of everyone else. @Chanku, @Elbbsas, @Katie, @Gabrielle.
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  • There was a suggestion of adding a section, thus.

    2 a) Specifically, Chanku has expanded Wintrean culture through the creation of an unofficial Minecraft Tekkit server which has become very popular with the Wintrean community.

    I feel it is worth adding to the text and thus will do so.
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    a) Specifically, Chanku has expanded Wintrean culture through the creation of an unofficial Minecraft Tekkit server which has become very is popular with the Wintrean community.
    "Has become very" isn't necessary. Also, maybe swap "with" with "among"?

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    3) The Storting recognizes that Chanku has been an instrumental driver of Wintrean parliamentary and legal culture, particularly through her unparalleled belief in and devotion to the Underhusen as an institution, through such accomplishments as:
    a) Having ran as a candidate for Underhusen in every election since the Storting was established, currently a span lasting over five years and growing.
    b) Having been elected to 16 Underhusen sessions, where the Underhusen placed its faith in her by selecting her as its Speaker for 8 of those sessions and its Speaker Pro Tempore for another 4 of those sessions.
    c) Having represented the Monarchy in parliamentary matters for an additional session as Chairperson of the Overhusen.
    d) Having authored, co-authored, or and influenced a number of acts that have passed into law, including the Citizenship and Demonym Act, the Code of Criminal Laws, the Default Seats of the Underhusen Act, and the Procedural Rules Speaker and Officers Amendment.
    e) Having tested the region's legal system by bringing its first lawsuit.
    I can't recall off the top of my head why, but "or" doesn't read well. Someone spot me with this one?
    Otherwise, this reads fine. I considered arguing for "such accomplishments as: / Running as a candidate / Being elected / Representing / Authoring / Testing" as that seems to fit the lead in better. However, having them begin with the same word ups the readability. It is an option, but I think it's fine the way it is now.

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    a) In particular, as Jarl of Foreign Affairs, Chanku created the first formal Ministry mandate in Wintreath's history, which reorganized the ministry and in part led to a revival of the ministry and in foreign affairs unseen since the period right[_]after the region was founded.
    Two spaces instead of one.

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    7) Recognizing the lengths Chanku has gone to in order to defend the region and its honour, the Storting additionally grants her the honor title of "Champion of the Just".
    Is "honor title" a particular phrase? It reads as off, a bit. Otherwise, the spelling of honour changes halfway. That's my AMA shtick. I'm assuming we lean towards the American spellings, usually, and/or the dialect the writer uses. Either way, either "honor title" is an official phrase or one of these needs to change.

    And my standard twitching over the subsection labeling, of course.

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    Regarding content, does anybody have anything they'd like to bring up? As is, I plan to vote aye provided the (red) points are addressed.
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  • I've made changed to the text in line with your observations.
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  • "Has become very" isn't necessary. Also, maybe swap "with" with "among"?
    It's not absolutely necessary, but I think it gives it a bit of flair.

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    Is "honor title" a particular phrase? It reads as off, a bit. Otherwise, the spelling of honour changes halfway. That's my AMA shtick. I'm assuming we lean towards the American spellings, usually, and/or the dialect the writer uses. Either way, either "honor title" is an official phrase or one of these needs to change.
    I seem to remember that it was an actual phrase I pulled somewhere, but I can't find it now...most examples of such titles use the phrase honorific, so that might be a fine substitute.
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  • As a proud child of the Commonwealth I would just use the U in honour and go with Honour Title.
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  • Honour would be better as most of our laws actually use honour instead of honor (See, the Speaker is the Right Honourable and each Skrifa is the Honourable)
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  • Perfect, I'll go with that.
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  • Much obliged, so we have a second?
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  • I require a second on either the motion to vote or to extend debate, @Elbbsas and @Gabrielle.
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