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As per Wintreath policy, this message was sent to The kingdom of britain and ireland in response to a mass recruitment telegram sent to our region.

Salutations, %NATION%!

I'm messaging you as the Monarch of Wintreath, a new region that's only now becoming established. Unfortunately, an account linked to your government, Henry Devereux II, has chosen to violate the sovereignty of Wintreath and other regions by sending an unprovoked mass recruitment to our regions. This is even more upsetting given the fact that we had open embassies and diplomatic relations with this region. Accordingly, we feel that you deserve a special invitation to pursue greater opportunities in our region, Wintreath! We would love for you to join our growing, close-knit region and community.

What does Wintreath have to offer, you ask?

Wintreath is home to an open, welcoming, close-knit community.
-Only three months after founding, Wintreath is a top 25 region in NationStates with a mix of both new and veteran players.
-Our off-site forum is one of the most active in NationStates. Play games, vote or run for a legislative Underhusen position, or just chat with regionmates.
-Wintreath has a very diverse community, including a vibrant LGBTQ community. Join in and take part in our zany antics!
-We play fair, and don't try to ruin other regions with our recruitment tactics!

Wintreath is quickly becoming a region of culture!
-A number of roleplays on our off-site forums are accepting sign-ups right now!
-We are buillding a unique, community-driven database of people, locations, and lore of our region for any roleplay to utilize in the future.
-We regularly hosts events such as movie nights, with game nights to potentially start soon!
-Wintreath has a dedicated Steam group for regionmates to find each other and have fun together!

Wintreath has a mix of appointed and elected positions!
-Elections to our lower legislature, the Underhusen, are every two months and are open for all Citizens to run in!
-Citizens can propose bills to the legislature as well as debate all bills that come before it.
-Appointed ministry positions and the ability to apply for positions in many ministries ensure that those that want to make a name for themselves can.
-Committees are regularly formed to put together special activities or events, which any Citizen can volunteer for.

Our military is one of the premier defender armies in the game!
-The Hvitt Riddaral is active and has played a role in a number of recent significant liberations of occupied regions.
-Our military works to uphold the sovereignty of other regions and protect the natives that call those regions home.
-Training in military gameplay is provided to those that are new or unfamiliar with how to play.
-Promotions and officer ranks are available to those who stand out on the battlefield!

And more. Every day our region is growing, and adding new faces, discussions, and activities for you to enjoy. If you are interested at all, consider trying out our region by clicking the "Move" button at the bottom of this telegram. You're not obligated to stay, so what do you have to lose? I also apologize if you are frustrated at receiving this message, but please understand that this is how many of us feel at having received such a message from this region. Even if you choose to remain, please consider urging your government to refrain from sending mass recruitment telegrams in the future and to respect the sovereignty of other regions. Otherwise, we would love to see you in Wintreath! Thank you for your time and consideration.

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Salutations, %NATION%!

I'm messaging you as the Monarch of Wintreath, a new region quickly becoming established in NationStates. Unfortunately your "honourable" Chairman/WA Delegate, Leningrad Union, has chosen to violate the sovereignty of Wintreath and other regions by sending an unprovoked mass-recruitment telegram to nations in our regions, attempting to undermine our regions for a quick burst of recruits. Accordingly, we feel that you deserve a special invitation to pursue greater opportunities in our region, Wintreath! We would love for you to join our growing, close-knit region and community.

What does Wintreath have to offer, you ask?

Wintreath is home to an open, welcoming, close-knit community.
-Our four month anniversary is tomorrow, and we're already a top 20 region with a mix of both new and veteran players.
-Wintreath has a very diverse community, including a vibrant LGBTQ community. Join in and take part in our zany antics!
-Active regional message board, off-site forum, and IRC channel, giving a choice of platforms to interact with our region.
-We play fair, and don't attempt to undermine other regions with our recruitment tactics!

Wintreath is quickly becoming a region of culture!
-A number of roleplays on our off-site forums are accepting sign-ups right now. A convenient activity board on our region pages gives a full list!
-We are buillding a unique, community-driven database of people, locations, and lore of our region for any roleplay to utilize in the future.
-We regularly hosts events such as movie nights, with game nights to potentially start soon!
-Wintreath has a dedicated Steam group for regionmates to find each other and have fun together!

Wintreath has a mix of appointed and elected positions!
-Elections to our lower legislature, the Underhusen, are every two months and are open for all Citizens to run in!
-Citizens can propose bills to the legislature as well as debate all bills that come before it.
-Appointed ministry positions and the ability to apply for positions in many ministries ensure that those that want to make a name for themselves can.
-Committees are regularly formed to put together special activities or events, which any Citizen can volunteer for.

Our military is one of the premier defender armies in the game!
-The Hvitt Riddaral is active and has played a role in a number of recent significant liberations of occupied regions.
-Our military works to uphold the sovereignty of other regions and protect the natives that call those regions home.
-Training in military gameplay is provided to those that are new or unfamiliar with how to play.
-Promotions and officer ranks are available to those who stand out on the battlefield!

And more. Every day our region is growing, and adding new faces, discussions, and activities for you to enjoy. If you are interested at all, consider trying out our region by clicking the "Move" button at the bottom of this telegram. You're not obligated to stay, so what do you have to lose? I also apologize if you are frustrated at receiving this message, but please understand that this is how many of us feel at having received such a message from this region. Even if you choose to remain, please consider urging your government to refrain from sending mass recruitment telegrams in the future and to respect the sovereignty of other regions. Otherwise, we would love to see you in Wintreath! Thank you for your time and consideration.

Salutations? Who uses that word?

I do.

I think it works

Good message, although I might try and emphasize the apologetic-it's-your-delegates-fault thing a little more, get the sympathy vote

You have to be careful with that aspect of it, cause if you go too far with that aspect of it you'll get people that reply that you're doing the same thing and two wrongs don't make a right and such.

Still, if you'd like to write something specifically I'll try to work with it the next time it happens.

What was the difference between the two?