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Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 05, 2017, 11:32:18 PM
I've been consistently stuck in a writer's block for the past year or so. I've been writing outlines and short little things, but prose is just not working. This is getting on my nerves. About an hour ago, I went on TV Tropes and hit the "random trope" button, then wrote for half an hour. I was hoping for a full hour, but I ran out of steam, so half an hour it is.




The desert air was full of blades. Never literal blades. The wars that clashed over the dunes had long since spent, with the last hints of it being the red streaked sand and the occasional rusted sword. No, these blades were the sunlight pounding over his head. These blades were the sharp sting of sand caught on a stray slice of wind. These blades were the light shining from the curves of metal in the trader’s caravan. These blades were the heat that filled his lungs, dry, draining. The desert air was filled with blades, and that was purely in the day.

At night, the air stayed sharp. It was in the chill that sunk into his bones, stealing the wounds the sunlight had left. Yet the moon was surely kinder than sunlight, and the stars were crisper than the reflections. But the sand in the air still hurt. The moon and stars were not a comfort, like he had hoped. They were sharper than memories. They were not his companions, not anymore.

The iron in the dunes still watched him, whispering for him to break.

He dared not sleep. Not at day, not at night. The traders jeered in their rough tongues around him -- yet another desert test -- but if he slept, he would dream. Distaste bubbled in his throat. If the desert were a battle, then his destination would be the war. And what a war. To think, a simple happenstance would lead him from the comfort of snow into this… this… clot of a place. And at the end of it all, a happy ending.

You should be pleased, they had whispered. You are going to do so much good.

His hands tightened on the horse’s reigns. They weren't even attached to its muzzle, and his own legs were tied in place. Curse that little demon. Curse it from the sun to the shadows.

You are a gift, they had said. Feh. How literal could it have been? Why had he not realised. Those creatures never lied, not when the truth was so much more fun.

Sparks jumped across his skin. They caught in the cuffs he wore.

He was a gift. A gift to be wrapped in the ropes of finery until everything he had was torn away. His blood. He will never see any who rose from it. He will be tied to another and….

That was why he could not sleep, for sleep brings the dreams your waking eyes flee from. It was all in the name of the future. He was just another sword to be cast into the sands. His gaze drifted to a streak in the sand. How much of it was blood, he wondered. How much of it was the memory?

The horse kept walking, striding through stained sand. The traders kept laughing in their tongue, all harsh hisses and barks. They would stop soon, to avoid the peak of sunlight. They were not bothered, but they couldn't have their gift waste away. Gifts. Curse that demon.

The horse kept walking. Thud, thud, thud. If only it keeled over and died. He would be left behind to rot. He would be left to the sands eventually, but he would still have his dignity. Not for long as the heat baked him and shut him down, organ by organ, but those lizards wouldn't be able to watch. Or creatures would hunt him down. That would be a dignified death. He would add to the blood on the sands in silence. If he found a sword, he might even take some with him.

Oh look. The patterns on that dune were like the viens in a butterfly. He wished he could fly. Even if he fell, it would be freeing.

The horse stopped.

Time to break.




Word Count: 634
Time: 30ish minutes.
Prompt: Marry For Love (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/MarryForLove)
Basically, a character declares that they don't want to get married for money, political gain, and so on, but out of wuvy duvy stuff.
Success at following the prompt: Not really. The character never directly states that they would prefer marriage out of love, plus marriage isn't directly stated. But hey, at least I manage to write a thing.
Possible Improvements: I feel that I used too many sentence fragments to try set the mood. I've used them as a crutch in the past and I'm trying to avoid overusing them. I'm also doubtful that I stuck to one tense.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Gerrick on May 06, 2017, 12:13:56 AM
Very good. You're an eloquent writer and seem to be an expert with metaphors. Well done. :)
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 06, 2017, 09:07:16 PM
Cheers, Gerrick!

This one and the previous one are not connected in the slightest.




Blues and yellows and pinks and whites and all of it is awe-some! The cage goes rattle rattle rattle. The people with other cages goes blah blah blah. I wave to another in another cage. They moved too quickly to wave back. Aw.

Mumma looks tired. Whoa, look look look, mumma! All the blues and yellows and pinks and whites! Are we taking more of them? Are we gonna buuuuy more? Mum mum mum mum! Look there! I want the r--

No no no no no no NO! I scrunch my nose up as the awe-some box goes away. I want it! Give it back! Mumma shakes her head no no no no but I WANT it! It is awe-some! It has a rocket and a blue and it's a boom, bomb, awe-some thing! Why can't I have it!

The cage rattle rattle rattles to a stop. Mumma smiles at me, she still looks tired and she should, meanie, and she goes away. I kick my feet against the cage. Meanie, meanie, meanie poopy pants head. I kick again, mumma says ‘Don't throw a fuss sweetie look here's your favourite you don't want that sugary nonsense.’ She's the no sense. She's a meanie. She's un-awe-some. I give the cord around me my best dad look. Grr, I'm a bear and you will run away from me, and then I will gobble gobble munch crunch lunch.

Mumma still won't listen. I roar like a bear, a big brown people omh nomming bear, but she's over there looking at metal barrels. She still looks tired. Like a bear I pounce on the cord, pulling, tugging, tearing, I am a bear and I will re-turn to my nat-tur-ral hah-bit-tat.

There's a click! A clicky click! My toothy bear grin works! I wriggle out of the cage, freedom! Then, quiet, quiet, follow the blues and yellows and pinks and whites to the spaceship. I will fly to the moon and find the moon bears. ‘How did you get here’ he'll say, and I say ‘On my spaceship hurry in before my bearsuit runs out of fresh air!’

Where's the spaceship?

I stop against a wall of stuff. Everything is made of lights. It is terrible, the worst, the worst thing for a bear. Bears need grass and fruit and little bunnies to CHOMP. The white isn't grass, the blue isn't sky, the pink isn't bunnies and the yellow isn't the sun. This isn't fair. I will find my rocket! Then we will fly, fly, fly to the grass with moon bears and make a home.

Arrrrgh why is this so terrible! I look look look everywhere and my rocket is nowhere! Wait! Wait wait wait wait wait! Where is it I just saw it come back please, back please, where where where where--

Noooo. This is the worst! Not awe-some! Mumma says that when lost, stay put until someone finds you, but I can't find my lost rocket. Maybe she didn't listen to her mumma and was walking around. Silly billy, you have to stay still to be found.

Maybe mumma can help? It's a quest. Mumma has to help if it’s a quest. A quest to find the rocket so I can fly to the moon so I can rescue the moon bears so I can go to the grasslands so I can make a bear home. It's not a real quest, but it's super important.

Oh! Mumma! There she is, on the other side of the corridor. Mumma mumma mumma can you help me find the rocket-- mumma?

Oh no.

Mumma? She's super sad and super tired. She needs a hug. I hug her. I'm sorry mumma, were you scared? Don't be a scared, I'm a super tough bear and I'll growl at anyone who bites.

Ow! Mumma! No I don't WANT the cage I want the ROCKET mumma you have to help, it's a quest mumma! Mum! Muuuuuuum!




Word Count: 657
Time: 31 minutes.
Prompt: Chocolate Frosted Sugar Bombs (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ChocolateFrostedSugarBombs)
Those lovely sugary cereals for kids that are 100% sugar and marketing.
Successes: I followed the prompt decently. The cereal was the main driving force of the narrative (aside from bears. No idea where that came from). I'm far too proud of the moon bear reference and all the implications of this kid's home life it brings. Kid probably hates trains.
Improvements: I think I need more practice at writing children. Far too many exclamation points were used, and I didn’t have the confidence to muck up as much grammar as a child would do. Also, I have no idea how young the child was. The ending was kinda meh. I was considering a kidnapping, but that would've been needlessly dramatic.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 07, 2017, 08:11:12 PM
Same world as from this:
The desert air was full of blades....



They whistled between their teeth, a counterpoint to the wind outside. Like dancers, their fingers crossed strings and fiddled with fiddles. The heavy heat inside had ruined the tuning. Ruined! What a world, what a world, was it not? They flashed a grin to occupants nearby, twisting their face into apologies.

‘My sorrows,’ they told a collection of children. Specks, nothing more, one was a little bright but not quite right. ‘It is not cooperating tonight,’ they said to a mourning wife. She didn't know, but her husband still lived -- trapped in the snow, waiting for a rescue that would never come.

They made a note to give him a visit. It would not be long until the cold stole him away.

Hour by hour, their fingers travelled up and down their instrument. Pegs twisted, but never were right. The little people drifted in and out of the cold tavern, never really looking at the bard in the corner. Well, one child almost managed it. She was bright, but not quite right.

Such is the life of the songwrite who never played. They tried to avoid their sharpest grin, nodding to the coins that fell to their cap. Their eyes never stopped roaming, never looking at the fiddle, just watching and watching, waiting for the right little spark.

They never paused for a meal. Their fingers plucked, caressed, shifted, but never held food between their tips. They pushed down another too-sharp grin. Flat little teeth bared instead.

Through the door a curl of cold crept inside, nipping at the heels of some workerman or other. Their eyes paused.

Oh. Hello there.

With a sweep of their cape, they stood and they bowed. The coins, they tipped into a pocket. The fiddle, they slung over their back. Their smile stayed flat, a bit buck-toothed, and they left the tavern.

The chill of the night was a breath of fresh air. It coiled like a snake in its nest. They paused for a moment to shed the warmth. They cricked their neck, eyes like coal fixed on the small shadow. It was even clearer once free of the warmth -- he would do nicely, very nicely.

They hunched their shoulders, pressed a grimace to their face, and trudged through the snow to the shape.



Word Count: 381
Time: Something less than 30 minutes? I was interrupted halfway and forgot to pause my timer.
Prompt: Wandering Minstrel (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WanderingMinstrel)
A character who wanders, playing music for money.
Successes: Fewer sentence fragments are always a plus. For someone who knows nothing about music, I don't think I wrote anything immersion breaking regarding it. Plus the prompt was followed, more or less (even though the character isn't actually a minstrel, whoops).
Improvements: I feel like you can see the exact moment where I went 'Screw it; this guy is not actually a minstrel.' (It's at the first use of the word "twisting.") Also, ew, I acknowledged the eyes of a character. Good grief this one is short. I think I found a word I use too much ("Oh"), but I'll need a bit more data. (But "Oh" is so versatile...).
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 08, 2017, 10:29:41 PM
This continues directly from the previous.



He would only stop for a minute. That is what he had planned. He would stop for a minute, wait for the wind to tone itself down, and then keep walking. He shoved his hands deeper in his pockets. His gloves were ice and he could barely feel their burn.

One minute passed. Then two, then three. The wind did not slow. Of course not, it would not bear slowing its deluge of snow being hurled at them all.

Ahead of him, a door swung open. A narrow bead of light shot through the snow, then vanished moments later. Curse the snow, curse the cold, curse everything about this night.

No point waiting much longer. No point at all, other than how he did not want to step back into the wind. If he went now, he would be by a fire in half an hour. Or he could wait and hope that the walk may become mildly easier.

‘Come on,’ he said to himself. Pleaded, more like. ‘Just snow. Snow, wind.’

It did not look any more appealing.

His gaze drifted down. He could see the patterns in the ice, but he was not looking for that. A bit of wood would be helpful. A piece of tinder, even a twig, he could make use of it. He kicked his boot through the snow. It hit something solid.

‘Thank the gods,’ he mumbled. He did not dare withdraw his hands. Instead he kicked, deliberately slow, and cleared the snow. It was brown, light, and looked like a shard of a barrel.

He picked one hand. It protested as he drew it back into the night air -- even more so when he stripped the glove off with his teeth. He crouched, forefinger to thumb, and pressed them to the end of the wood.

A spark leapt between his fingers. The wood was unchanged.

‘Snow not melted,’ he said. Another spark, fueled by frustration. ‘Dry enough.’

He took a breath of frigid air, held it, then forced the sparks out. One, eight, twenty, more, they were too quick to count.

He stopped. A tiny flame was there. He scooped up the wood and turned, putting it between the wall and himself. He probably expended far more energy than he would get back from it, but who cared? He was warm now in the moment. He'd just be shivering later in the night. This way, his fingers would stop buzzing like the edge of a blade in a smithy.

Ok, now he could go. His fingers were not about to die, he had a little bit of warmth, he had something other than the cold to focus on, and--

He turned and choked on a yelp.

A smile peered out of the storm. ‘Good evening.’

He could not speak. His eyes darted up and down the other. He took in the minstrel’s cloak, the fiddle on their back, the exposed skin of their arms and hands, and he stopped at the footprints the other had left. There were no footprints. How long had they been standing there?

‘You watching me?’ he said. He deliberately put the wood and the flame behind his back. They had probably been there a while, but no sense in flaunting it.

The other’s head tilted. ‘I was merely passing by, my friend.’

‘That not a no,’ he snapped.

‘Perhaps.’ Their smile seemed to widen. They took a step forward, and he tried to step back. The wall was in the way.

They weren't blinking, he realised. Unnatural ice crept down his back. No blinks, no shivers, nothing. They had not broken eye contact once.

‘An interesting talent, you have there,’ the other said slowly. It was like they were rolling the words around their tongue, considering every syllable before spitting it out. ‘I cannot imagine the troubles it has bought you.’

‘It is none of your business,’ he said sharply. ‘What do you want?’

With aching slowness, they blinked. It did nothing to stop his racing heart. It was a deliberate slowness. ‘Were you aware that your deliverance dramatically improves when defensive? Delightful. I was not looking forward to discussing matters with a street urchin. Shall we talk?’

‘I think you should leave.’

Their smile widened again. ‘That not a no,’ they said.



Word Count: 716
Time: 36 minutes.
Prompt: "Yes" / "No" Answer Interpretation (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/YesNoAnswerInterpretation)
When someone gives a question that should be answered with yes or no, the other person gives an ambiguous answer. The asker then either asks or offers whether or not the answer was a yes or a no. Screw this prompt, it made me need to write dialogue.
Successes: Ha ha ha, dialogue is hard. I did some dialogue. Yay for me. Also my cheat of "one guy is not speaking full sentences" managed to make the characters sound different enough, so that's good. I was nearing 25 minutes and the characters hadn't started talking, shush.
Improvements: I have trouble multitasking in writing. When there is dialogue, I'm rubbish at description. When there's desription, I'm not going to focus on plot. When there is a plot, the dialogue greatly suffers. The inverse is true too. Plus, I'm not great at making characters sound different. Basically, I'm not happy with how the POV character sounded nor how their internal thoughts evaporated compared the first story.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 16, 2017, 06:06:50 AM
This is unconnected from anything.



Tomorrow, the Merrenfires Adventure Park will close. Nobody at the park knows that, nor do the faceless shadows puppeteering the rides, employees, and every drop of pleasure. Not a single soul will have a warning to give. Why would they? Ordinary days cause no alarms to ring. The birds will chirp and flutter about the same-old power lines and rooftops, and the rats will burrow into the garbage, but the sun will still shine and the breeze will still blow.

The children on the coasters will ride up and down on the same-old tracks, instincts tricking them into thinking death is at every corner -- and they will fail to realise that they are on the same-old, same-old path that hundreds had been on before. The same-old track, the same-old story, they will think that these fun days will never end. As with any other day the parents will drive their cars into pretty little rows, where the silent sun will strike their eyes. The same dance will happen. The same-old routine, where any misstep is scorned and jeered upon.

A foot that trips on a metal can will create a clatter that shatters a sleeping morning, and all heads will whip around to stare at the wrongdoer. Or a bottle will be dropped and snap in twain. Though a meer pair of pieces would be easy to clean, the free feet of the petulant child would not care for such distinctions.

The same-old tired morning. Funny, is it not? The little people constantly complaining in their heads?

Go faster, I am bored, I am hungry, hurry up, I am scared, I do not like this, get out of the way, where is the bathroom, the line is too large, bastard dented my car, I dropped my toy, I do not love her, where is my son, this suit is too hot, do not touch the wet paint, this tastes gross, I want the red one, on and on and on.

By tomorrow, all those noises will stop. The Merrenfires Adventure Park will close, but it will not go quietly. People are fickle. They complain and shout and scorn and jeer, but they still love what is theirs. They will gather, voices strung high, in the same places where their heads had been filled with complaints.

That does not mean the people will be silent. No, people will never do that. Instead their heads will be filled with other sounds, other words.

Why did this happen, this is wrong, somebody fix this, it is the government’s fault, we should tear it down, this is not fair to the children, we should not blame the park, what happened, shut the fuck up, where am I going to work now, this has to be illegal, let me through let me in, who is to blame, we need to blame someone, on and on and on again.

That is how people are. Same-old people in the same-old rows, no matter the occasion. No matter if they are right, or wrong, or if they hold all the facts, or if what they ask for is possible, they still act. They are people. Speaking is what people do best -- within their minds and to one another. Even if the sun starts to scream, or the weather beats them into a pulp, people will still talk. Their minds are filled with whys and whos and whats, like the curious children they grew up from.

People never really grow up, do they. All that happens is that they gain new experience, and learn what same-old stories will remain, and which are mutable. No matter what happens, people will always keep talking. Warnings, alarms, screams, scorn, jeers, cries, complaints, demands, regrets, blames, the same-old words turned to different patterns for different occasions. The birds may not chirp in the mornings, and the rats may not burrow. But, people will always talk.



Word Count: 652
Time: 30ish minutes.
Prompt: Souvenir Land (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SouvenirLand)
Generic theme park, usually modeled off of Disneyland and other famous amusement parks. I got this prompt last week, but ended up sitting on it for ages because I had no idea what to write and didn't want to cheat and get a new one.
Successes: Writing in the nonpast tense is unusual for me, but I like the way this sounds. I think my opening paragraph is a little more engaging. When I sat down to write this I was trying my best to multitask, and I think it shows what with how I'm practically ticking off different writing devices (book ends, repetition, personification, yadda yadda). ...In hindsight, I'm not sure that's a good thing.
Improvements: Oh look, it is super deep for deepness's sake. :P I need to work on including a plot in these things, rather than just "Oooo look! A thing!" and listing pretty things. Then again, I should probably get into the habit of writing consistently before I can properly judge my writing.

...Oh gosh darn it, I was intending to work on dialogue. =D
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Eko_of_Solis_Occasus on May 22, 2017, 02:02:40 AM
I am having such a good time reading through all these.  You are a really gifted writer, not just a random kid on fanfiction.net or whatever.  I like the world that you are creating, with the hot vs. cold, and the magical sparks.  You have nice imagery and world-building.  I did notice a few grammar errors here and there, but they're so nit-picky that I wouldn't go through the trouble of fixing them.
If you want a challenge for writing, I have a proposal that I've attempted a few times myself.  The most common writing method is third-person, past tense; "He did this", "She did that".  This is the most natural.  There is also first-person, present tense, which I think you used a few times.  This is also natural, but more personal and harder to pull off (which you did).  Of course, the next step is... second-person, future tense (dun dun DUN!).  This is stuff like, "You'll step up the stairs and see her standing there, her pitch black hair swinging loosely in the breeze.  You'll freeze in place, your mind racing, and she will ever so slowly turn around to face you."
Of course, that's only if you want to.  You did actually use future-tense in the last story, and you used it well enough that I didn't notice at first.  I can't find many cases of 2nd-person, future tense online, so it'd be a cool experiment.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 22, 2017, 05:06:20 AM
I am having such a good time reading through all these.  You are a really gifted writer, not just a random kid on fanfiction.net or whatever.  I like the world that you are creating, with the hot vs. cold, and the magical sparks.  You have nice imagery and world-building. 
Thanks for the compliments, it really means a lot. Hopefully the RNG lands on something that sparks my interest into that world again.

...I should also write things more often.

I did notice a few grammar errors here and there, but they're so nit-picky that I wouldn't go through the trouble of fixing them.
Tell me anyway? It might be guidelines that I'm not aware of, or ones that I'm deliberately breaking for an effect. And if that effect isn't coming across, then I should probably try something else.

If you want a challenge for writing, I have a proposal that I've attempted a few times myself.  The most common writing method is third-person, past tense; "He did this", "She did that".  This is the most natural.  There is also first-person, present tense, which I think you used a few times.  This is also natural, but more personal and harder to pull off (which you did).  Of course, the next step is... second-person, future tense (dun dun DUN!).  This is stuff like, "You'll step up the stairs and see her standing there, her pitch black hair swinging loosely in the breeze.  You'll freeze in place, your mind racing, and she will ever so slowly turn around to face you."
Of course, that's only if you want to.  You did actually use future-tense in the last story, and you used it well enough that I didn't notice at first.  I can't find many cases of 2nd-person, future tense online, so it'd be a cool experiment.
Hm... I've been picking perspective and tense to fit the story -- so in other words, just on a whim. I agree with you in that 3rd-past and 1st-nonpast/present are natural, so I probably wouldn't have gone for the more interesting types. Now that you've mentioned it, hopefully I'll go for it sooner rather than later. It sure will be interesting. Plus, challenges are FUN. That's why I'm doing this!

(And also to get into the habit of daily writing, and to get back into How To Write after spending the last few years primarily writing outlines, and a host of other reasons, but FUN is a primary motivator).

I'm glad to know my tenses in the last one were ok! That was the secondary goal of the piece.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 22, 2017, 05:06:49 AM
This, once again, is unconnected from anything.



With that, Jarret pushed the mug back across the table. He promptly regretted it, the unpleasant grinding grating at his ears. Lacina’s hands sped to her own.

‘That is not nice,’ she reprimanded. Her delicate hands scooped up the mug, cupping against her chest. ‘I do not understand why you are acting this way, but--’

‘ “Bee spit that isn't honey.” Sorry, but I'm not sticking any of that into my mouth, thank you!’ Jarret grimaced. His words were echoing into his brain.

Lacina pouted up at him. ‘It will help,’ she repeated.

‘Help me get rotten teeth and an upset stomach, you mean,’ Jarret said. He waved his hand, sending Lacina backpedaling a few steps. ‘Go play with mistletoe and stop bothering me.’

‘I do not--!’ Lacina dropped the mug back on the table, wings buzzing frantically. ‘I am assisting you and--!’

A few more knives decided to poke at Jarret’s skull, and vibrated in tune with the fairy’s words.

‘Uuuuugh, stop!’ Jarret ground his palm into an eye, the other boring down on the fairy. ‘Leave. Go to your room. Bother a sleeping dragon. Avoid getting caught by Peter Pierce. Whatever.’

‘--you are sensitive to light, you are flinching at loud noises, and you are obviously in pain!’ Lacina’s voice was fucking piercing. ‘You have been poisoned!’

‘Yeah, willingly, that's what hangovers do! Now fuck off before I remove a loud noise!

‘As your assistant, it is my duty to care for and protect you!’

‘Fucking-- since when? What the fuck has Sally been saying to you lot!’

‘To protect this sanctuary, nay, this world, I must protect you!’ Lacina’s hand shot up and pointed somewhere in the vicinity of Jarret’s nose. ‘If you fall, so shall the nation!’

There was a ringing silence. Literally, thanks to how high-pitched the fairy’s voice was.

Jarret glared at her. Lacina’s stance -- in all her ten centimetres -- emitted pure confidence.

With a sigh, he pushed her hand back down along with his annoyance. Jarret was unsure if he managed it. ‘I'm confiscating whatever cartoons Sally has been giving you, as well as any cookbooks I find up there. And you aren't my assistant.’

‘Child, then,’ Lacina said promptly.

‘No no no no no no-- child?’

Innocent eyes blinked up at him. ‘Yes? Is that not the correct word?’

Scrap the innocence -- this chick knew exactly what she meant.

‘No, it isn't. Babysitter. Landlord. I am not the parent of a hundred and one damnations.’

‘Fifty six,’ Lacina corrected, Jarret mouthing the number along with her. ‘And Sally-Ann said--’

‘I fucking knew it,’ Jarret muttered.

‘--you are in charge of us!’ Lacina raised her chin. ‘We could not possibly talk to you with, um, vulgar and um, demeaning, terms.’

‘No.’

Jarret yelped as Lacina buzzed forward into his face. He leant back, having to cross his eyes to keep her in view.

‘If you are not in charge of us,' she said slowly, 'Then that would mean we can fly around as we wish, correct?’

She… goddamn it.

Jarret pushed her away from his face. ‘Fine! Governor, I'm your governor. Happy?’

Lacina beamed.

‘Don't look so pleased with yourself,’ he said. ‘And landlord is not demeaning, that's what I am.’

‘Very well!’ Lacina chirped. ‘As you are our newly titled governor, I will be sure to let everyone know. It is important to let the people in charge know about any all all problems!’

For a few seconds, Jarret had a sudden and vivid view of his future. It was one filled with countless chirping, high-pitched voices and buzzing wings and an inability to do anything without accidentally batting one over the head.

‘No, no that is not necessary,’ he said quickly. ‘Why don't you take care of that? You did that before, right?’

Lacina’s head tilted in clear confusion. ‘But you are in charge.’

‘Yessss.’ Jarret drew out the word, stalling for time. ‘I… I am delegating. As governor, I am allowed to delegate.’

The room was quiet for a moment. The buzz of wings filled Jarret’s ears, a gentle breeze ruffling all his papers. The mug of… whatever it was, was starting to smoke.

Lacina’s expression brightened. ‘Ok! Nice talking to you, governor!’ she said, and vanished.

Jarret blinked a few times, then immediately checked every door, drawer, and hidden corner. She was gone. Jarret waited a few more minutes, then let his head hit his desk.

‘Damn fairies…’ he muttered. At least his hangover could rest and--

‘Oh, one more thing--’

‘Fuck!' Jarret's head snapped up, hitting his lamp. 'What!’

Lacina dropped a pile of papers on the desk. ‘Sally-Ann wanted to congratulate you on finally getting an assistant.’

She vanished.

Jarret stared at the opposing wall. His expression was blank.

A minute passed.

Across the hallway outside, Sally-Ann looked up. Muffled shouting reached her ears. She smirked, winked up at the fairy in the corner, and got back to work.



Word Count: 821
Time: I don't know, to be honest. This one was patchy and I spent a while fixing things.
Prompt: Hideous Hangover Cure (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/HideousHangoverCure)
It's a pretty descriptive title. It's a cure for hangover that is hideous in some fashion. Jeez, first the amusement park, now hangovers. RNG really wants to make me write on things I can't relate to well.
Goals: Write something that began "in medias res." Building off of that, write non-clunky exposition. Then there's dialogue, and writing with free indirect discourse (which I do a lot, but I've been reading Katherine Mansfield and thought "gee I should try doing this deliberately").
Successes: People! Talking! With names! Whoaaaaa! More seriously, I feel that the character's had somewhat distinct voices (although I cheated again with "swearing" versus "lack of contractions." Ah well). But, there's more of it. And as a bonus, there's some vague comedy attempts. And 200 more words than normal.
Improvements: I think it shows how I put this down for a bit. The direction of the scene seems to have swung like a swing every few lines. I actually went and edited parts of the fairy's dialogue because her tone had gone frightfully inconsistent. (Plus I am near certain I overused the swearing. Why are there no "how to write sweary characters" guides).

If I were to edit this, the first objective would be to add some scene setting. There are too many short paragraphs and that is making the page look like a zebra. =D
Next Prompt
I thought I should do this, because after I got the Hangover Cure and the Theme Park tropes I was very tempted to "reroll."

Prompt: Physical Scars, Psychological Scars (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PhysicalScarsPsychologicalScars)

...Really. I decide to telegraph what I write and THIS is what I get? I swear, RNG does not like me.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Eko_of_Solis_Occasus on May 22, 2017, 10:11:06 AM
Thanks for the compliments, it really means a lot. Hopefully the RNG lands on something that sparks my interest into that world again.

...I should also write things more often.

Tell me anyway? It might be guidelines that I'm not aware of, or ones that I'm deliberately breaking for an effect. And if that effect isn't coming across, then I should probably try something else.

Hm... I've been picking perspective and tense to fit the story -- so in other words, just on a whim. I agree with you in that 3rd-past and 1st-nonpast/present are natural, so I probably wouldn't have gone for the more interesting types. Now that you've mentioned it, hopefully I'll go for it sooner rather than later. It sure will be interesting. Plus, challenges are FUN. That's why I'm doing this!

(And also to get into the habit of daily writing, and to get back into How To Write after spending the last few years primarily writing outlines, and a host of other reasons, but FUN is a primary motivator).

I'm glad to know my tenses in the last one were ok! That was the secondary goal of the piece.

*Scours the stories for grammar mistakes.*
Alright, I ended up only finding two, and one of them if from the new story, so I don't know what I was trying to say in my last post.

"People never really grow up, do they." should be "People never really grow up, do they?", with a question mark instead of a period.

And this one is less important.  "And landlord is not demeaning, that's what I am." should be "And landlord is not demeaning.  That's what I am."

Also, your dialogue is looking nice, especially in the last one.  If you write a line and a reader can easily distinguish which character said it, even without looking at "he said"/"she said"/etc., then you have created two very distinct and developed characters

Thanks for the compliments, it really means a lot. Hopefully the RNG lands on something that sparks my interest into that world again.
Ayyy... I see what you did there.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 22, 2017, 07:13:26 PM
*Scours the stories for grammar mistakes.*
Alright, I ended up only finding two, and one of them if from the new story, so I don't know what I was trying to say in my last post.

"People never really grow up, do they." should be "People never really grow up, do they?", with a question mark instead of a period.

And this one is less important.  "And landlord is not demeaning, that's what I am." should be "And landlord is not demeaning.  That's what I am."
Oh, that's good. Both of those have justification behind them.

I have a tendency to drop question marks in order to convey a sense of "flatness" and/or a rhetorical question. Basically, I'm attempting to dissuade the reader from adding an upwards inflection that the question mark may imply!

Now, if the second was part of the narrative, I'd have written it out with a hyphen instead of a comma, or maybe a semicolon. I don't like to stick those into dialogue. It makes it feel unrealistic, or just throws the tone off. To me, a full stop would add too much of a pause. So by default, I end up with a comma.

Also, your dialogue is looking nice, especially in the last one.  If you write a line and a reader can easily distinguish which character said it, even without looking at "he said"/"she said"/etc., then you have created two very distinct and developed characters
I still feel like I've been cheating. =P

Ayyy... I see what you did there.
*Fingerguns* *Shoots foot*
Puns are amazing and any who say different are liars.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Eko_of_Solis_Occasus on May 23, 2017, 01:27:58 AM
Oh, that's good. Both of those have justification behind them.

I have a tendency to drop question marks in order to convey a sense of "flatness" and/or a rhetorical question. Basically, I'm attempting to dissuade the reader from adding an upwards inflection that the question mark may imply!

Now, if the second was part of the narrative, I'd have written it out with a hyphen instead of a comma, or maybe a semicolon. I don't like to stick those into dialogue. It makes it feel unrealistic, or just throws the tone off. To me, a full stop would add too much of a pause. So by default, I end up with a comma.
Those are both really good points, actually.  I withdraw my statement.

*Fingerguns* *Shoots foot*
Puns are amazing and any who say different are liars.
I'm so glad to have found another human being who does fingerguns with puns.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Gattoartico on May 23, 2017, 03:24:41 AM

I'm so glad to have found another human being who does fingerguns with puns.

But wassa bout meh? I does it too!
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 23, 2017, 05:49:47 AM
But wassa bout meh? I does it too!
Become one with the puns. Join the order of the Punchline. The force of gravity compels you.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 23, 2017, 05:57:44 AM
From the spark setting. I need to come up with a name for these.



Said the night to the lambs, you’ll say to the headsman. Do you see what I see?

He’ll strike -- one two -- and you’ll hit the ground. Obviously it’s not the best approach, but there will be no better path. You’ll smirk back up at him, daring him, and he’ll strike again. One two. Shall the fate of traitors be decided by blood and anger? Of course. That’s their downfall, right there, they just need to use it. Their arrogance.

Way up in the sky-- and he’ll hit again. A cut shall slide across your face, across your lying little mouth, he’ll say, or something to that effect. That’s what they all say. All traitors to the flesh deserve no pity. That’s their cry.

Blood will be iron against your tongue but you’ll hold your head high, on the ground, where all can see you. All the night air, surrounds, envelops, and you’ll hold your head high as you’re dragged from your cage into the crowd.

--little lambs, you’ll say, you’ll spit any blood out of your mouth and onto the snow. It’ll be a red stain, sudden and dark and shocking to the ground. It won’t be in line with their “perfect” plots, and you won’t back down easily. Do you see what I see--

They’ll strike and kick and try to keep you silent. You know this. But you won’t stop. Not for this not for this, never for this. You will not back down. You can’t. Not so long as there are people who need to see, need to know.

So you’ll keep talking.

A star, a star, dancing in the night, you’ll shriek the words out not matter what they do, with a tail as big as a--

And they’ll try to stop you.

Again, and again, one and two, barbs and chains and dragging you away in the snow, but you will not be silenced. You’ll see the faces of the hidden little sparks, and that will drive you onward.

With a tail--

One two.

--as big--

One two.

--as a kite!

And those little sparks will hear, and they’ll fly and they’ll fly, as far away as they can before the desert can ride. Those little lambs will be gone. They will flee. They will never, never, never track them down. If you are to die, their agenda will die with them.

And they will be fine.

They will be ok.

They will.

They will.

They….



Word Count: 412
Time: 14 and a half minutes. I ran out of words.
Prompt: Physical Scars, Psychological Scars (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PhysicalScarsPsychologicalScars)
When an injury causes physical scars, they can often symbolise the emotional/mental scars the event left behind.
Goals: I borrowed from Eko’s suggestion, since I was drawing a blank on how to use this prompt. I also added “allusion to Do You Hear What I Hear,” because why not. I was going to play with the formatting a bit more and distress the writing, but I dropped that as a primary goal.

Thoughts:
I did my best in 2nd person | nonpast/future tense. However, I feel that overshadowed the initial prompt, which explains why my writing petered out. Furthermore, English has pretty much two words for future tense -- will and shall. That is irritating. Repetition is sad. Hence why contractions show up in this (plus most readers will naturally think with contractions and “you” do so as well. Don’tcha?). I did like how I had an excuse to use italics for dialogue; it has an interesting effect. Plus I had some fun with ambiguous uses of “they.”

For the content of the work, I feel this is a piece that needs more around it. It might be good for say, a prologue, with the explanations for the scene filtering into the plot in later chapters. I mean, come on. Kite. It seems like such a strange word to have present! I have many ideas as to what that will be. Which is good, because I needed more ideas for this series of snips.
Anyway, Next Time:
I'll probably use Physical Scars again at a later point, since it wasn't really used this time.

Exotic Equip-- (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ExoticEquipment) Nope.
Crush Filter (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/CrushFilter).
...
...I am going to hit the button one more time. Just for fun.

Pinocchio Syndrome (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PinocchioSyndrome)
Now that's better.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on May 31, 2017, 07:28:08 AM
This is not connected to anything. It is also fairly long.



Worms of nerves were racing under her skin. This is fine. Things are going to be A-OK, no problems to be found, and it is full of good and everything is super fine. Her nerves were still on fire. There’s no reason for them to be. One conversation, that’s all.
 
Pace’s shoes squeaked against the floor, each sound raising her nerves another notch. Calm. Calm down. There are no reasons to worry. Matt said this would be ok. Squeak, cried her shoes, and dammit she should have not worn her trainers today. Stupid, stupid, lazy.
 
No, nope. This is fine. Squeak, went her shoes again, and Pace let her palm hit her face. Calm down. She dragged the hand down her face, eyes opening in its wake. Same snow-field of squeaky floors. Damn, she should not have worn her trainers -- Harley could probably pick up every bit of dirt she left behind her and then they would know she’d been walking in circles and then they’d know she’s nervous and god everything sucked.
 
At least the walls were not white. Harley wouldn’t be able to see how Pace had been leaning against the wall. Wait. Damn, colour wouldn’t do anything to hide that. Harley probably could see the sweat. No, calm down. If Harley was bothered by it, they’d be bothered by literally everything in the place. She’s a human -- Harley’s smart enough to know how humans litter cells everywhere and dammit Pace had been a moron. No reason to worry, she’s just another human to Harley. Chill for god’s sake. Harley would expect humans to be shedding themselves all the time.
 
Except that most humans did not walk back and forth while waiting for them, and god damn it Pace had been doing it again. Imagine if Matt had seen? He would giggle about it for weeks.
 
Deliberately, Pace went back to her chair and sat. If there was a way to sit with decisiveness, she damn well near achieved it. She found herself looking at the clock on the opposite wall. Ten more minutes.
 
The moment she read the clock, the nervous energy was back, and she was back on her squeaking shoes. Screw being laughed at. She needed calm. Calm calm calm calm calm.
 
Note: repeating the word calm over and over again really does not help in, you know, becoming calm. Stupid Pace. Stupid, stupid, Harley probably would join Matt if they heard him make fun of Pace, and then where would Pace be? Other than in a pit of shame. And in the location of being laughed at. Dammit.
 
As she passed it, Pace looked again to the clock. Nine minutes. Wow, she got a lot done in that minute. Nope, she can’t do this. She can’t do this! She needs to call this off. It may be one conversation, but doing the conversation would either break everything or well, not break everything but make everything scream in nerves and pressure and Harley can probably pick up on that and then Pace would absolutely be in that pit of shame and--
 
‘You asked for me?’
 
Pace nearly screamed, and certainly she did not trip on her own feet, nope, ha ha. Ok. Be cool, Pace. Be the coolest butterfly ever -- be cooler than a butterfly because they aren’t really super cool but they are damn cool. Pace looked behind her.
 
‘Oh! H-hey, Harley.’ Pace pushed her face into what kinda felt like a smile? Damn her. This is already a steaming pile of donkey hair. ‘You, phew, you got here quick.’
 
There was a pause. Then, Harley’s facial display blinked into raising one eyebrow. Wait, that’s a single one? Oh man, they can do the “the heck?” expression, Pace is doomed. Doomed! The blue lights blinked back to being neutral after a moment.
 
‘My apologies, ma’am,’ they said. They “blinked.” ‘Did you require my assistance?’
 
‘Uhhh no, not really?’ Pace said automatically.
 
Wait, shit, balls.
 
‘Very well,’ Harley was saying and no no no no that’s not what Pace meant to say.
 
Pace darted forward and caught Harley’s wrist. The smooth metal was cold against her fingers, not betraying an inch of the processes running under them.
 
‘W-wait, wait.’ Pace’s tongue was lead in her mouth. ‘Wait,’ she repeated.
 
Harley did as they were asked. Their head tilted, display blinking to look “down” at Pace’s hand. Oh damn, they know. Pace immediately let go. Don’t blush, for god’s sake.
 
When she let go, Harley stayed put. They were utterly motionless, like a sorcerer carved from marble, or from ice at summertime. Their display blinked back into raising an eyebrow.
 
That’s your cue to talk, moron. Pace smiled again, trying to keep it normal. ‘I just wanted to um, you know. Um.’
 
Harley had stopped right under one of the lights. The white glow surrounded them. It painted moonlight across every facet, turning wires and plates into diamonds.
 
Their visor was still raising an eyebrow. Blue and black -- the only black on them. ‘I do not know, ma’am,’ they said.
 
‘Don’t call--’ Pace bit her tongue. Don’t call me ma’am, you are absolutely allowed to talk to me, don’t call me ma’am, please. ‘I just wanted to… you know.’ Dammit, tongue. Work please.
 
The visor blinked, it was back to neutral, and some part of Pace was labelling it as “disinterest” or “annoyance,” and Harley hated her. That was it. She was done, dead, roasted.
 
‘As I said,’ Harley intoned, ‘I do not know.’
 
Words fled Pace like a barrage from a gun. ‘Hangoutwithme?’
 
The clock’s ticking was really, really loud. Pace could feel the heat of nerves now. Aw crap, Harley is going to sense that. Oh god. Oh god she is screwed.
 
Harley’s visor blinked a few times. Twin question marks, only for a second, then maybe a smile, then that raised eyebrow again and back to neutral.
 
‘I do not understand, ma’am,’ they declared.
 
Don’t call me that. ‘No, no that’s fine. That’s fine as fu-- as, stuff.’ Crap, crap crap crap. ‘Matt um, he said that you wanted to do… stuff. And he said that I should um, I should help? Do stuff?’
 
Her nerves were shaking in her skin, tensed up and afraid. She was ice, melting under the moonlight’s radiance. Should have had more clarity. That was not clear. Work, talk, dumb tongue, dumb you little dumb.
 
The slight whirring -- so quiet that Pace had tuned it out long ago -- kicked up a barely noticeable notch.
 
‘My apologies,’ Harley finally said. Their expression was painfully neutral. ‘Are you referring to Mr. Morner’s conversation on the twelfth? ‘
 
Was that when the non-work talk was? Pace thought it was the twelve. Maybe?
 
‘Um… yes!’ Just go for it, just go for it. ‘Yes, that is exactly it, yes, right. That. That is exactly what I am talking about.’
 
And the winner of the “most eloquent speaker award” goes to Pace. Good job with that clarity.
 
‘I see,’ Harley said.
 
Tick, tick, tick, went the clock. Why were they made so loud?
 
‘I do not understand.’
 
Pace had no idea what her face did, but it probably looked dumb. ‘What? But you--’
 
Oh! Stupid, stupid idiot!
 
‘--Ohhhh, right.’ Pace cleared her throat. Maybe it would reset her stumbling tongue. ‘Hang out. Have you… have you heard that phrase before?’
 
Harley’s vision blinked. This expression had the eyebrows tilted into what would be two sides of a triangle. Their mouth was a small and thin line.
 
‘I have not,’ they said.
 
‘Oh god--’ You idiot, don’t speak in pretty much a foreign language! Pace scooped into her pocket and tried to find her phone.  ‘Ok. Ohhhhkay. Give me a second.’
 
Again, the silence was filled by the ticking. It echoed in the room. Pace quickly pecked the words Hang Out Define in the search bar.
 
...Helpful.
 
‘In spite of seconds being an abstract noun, I have gifted you with one.’
 
Pace’s eyes darted up in time to see what was (yeah that was) an amused expression on Harley’s display. It blinked away the second Pace saw it. Oh god, she was blushing, wasn’t she?
 
‘Yeah, you have,’ Pace said. Her voice had to be a good octave higher. ‘Uh, right. Ok. Hang out.’
 
She looked again to the screen. Pace really didn’t think that washing clothes was going to help.
 
‘It’s basically when… two or more people get together and… do stuff.’
 
That was pathetic.
 
Harley’s display blinked back into amused. ‘You are not skilled at definitions,’ they noted.
 
‘Nope!’ Pace was definitely blushing. Harley absolutely knew. Oh man, she is going to die. ‘Ha, you’ve got me all clued up.’
 
...Why is Harley not saying anything? Oh damn, oh god damn. The light reflecting from them was making gorgeous patterns around the walls, just like Harley did with every-- don’t stare they’ll think you’re weird.
 
Pace had to keep talking. The ticking clock was far too loud. ‘Ha ha, you’re going to need to ask someone else for a propa thing, but that’s fine. right? Absolutely, totally, yup. Ha.’ Her voice was whiny and pitched into pain. ‘That’s all--’
 
Harley cut over Pace. ‘You were asking me to partake in “doing stuff” in a get together?’
 
Pace’s tongue tangled around itself. ‘Sorta?’
 
That was not what she meant to say.
 
‘Matt s-- Matt, he um. Social interaction and stuff and he thought I’d be best at it even though I’m rubbish and you can say no if you want to!’ Pace clamped her mouth shut.
 
Tick, tick, tick.
 
Good job. You’ve ruined everything. Harley will decline, then they’ll tell Matt about how weird Pace had been and then he’ll probably hack the cameras in this room and find the recordings and then he’d never let Pace around Harley again because she’s weird and she’ll never be able to chat with Harley between shifts and--
 
‘What would occur?’
 
‘Huh?’
 
Harley sounded patient, right? ‘When we are “hang-ing out.” What would occur?’
 
Pace tore her mind out of her thoughts, and became very interested in her trainers. Look at how dirt-coated they are. Wow. ‘Uhhh. I was thinking play video games?’ Her thoughts scrambled again, begging for attention. ‘Just… not worky, obligation stuff. Doing things for fun? You know what--’
 
‘Yes, I know what fun is.’
 
‘Good! Great!’ Pace said to the floor. ‘Wow. You are ama-- a really well put together… person. Yup. Ha ha.’ Oh god why did you say that.
 
‘I see. Very well.’
 
She really needed to clean these shoes. She should have thought today through. It would take immeasurable effort to force her gaze back up to meet Harley’s display.
 
Pace managed to raise her gaze to Harley’s foot. What an achievement, not.
 
‘...Wait, was that a yes?’ Pace managed.
 
It probably wasn’t, you are getting your hopes--
 
‘Yes.’
 
Unbidden, Pace’s neck spasmed to facing forward. Harley was still there, not looking like they hated Pace.
 
‘Oh! Wow, ok. Um.’
 
Harley was looking neutral. Were they happy about this? Just acting out of obligation? Shit, Pace should not have mentioned Matt, Harley may be doing this cause of obligation. Shit shit shit.
 
‘When do you want to?’ Pace said. She coughed, trying to dispel some of her dumb little dumbness. ‘Hang out, I mean.’
 
Harley’s head tilted -- the first time the statue moved in the conversation. The lights scattered like birds in the sky, like thoughts in the wind, like starlight far above.
 
‘I will need to consult with Mr. Morner,’ they said.
 
Oh thank god, they weren't brushing this off. Relief made Pace’s shoulders sag. ‘Well, he’s the one who said I should get a move on-- um.’
 
If she had the power to glare at her tongue, she would be the queen of the world.
 
‘Yeah, and so he’s all for us.’ Pace felt her eyes widen and she quickly tried to correct herself. ‘Hanging.’
 
Harley blinked back into a raised eyebrow.
 
‘Do you have a favourite pizza?’ Pace blurted out. ‘I was thinking pizza. I’m rubbish cook.’
 
Harley’s head tilted back to not being tilted. ‘I… enjoy pineapple,’ they said.
 
‘Pineapple?’ A grin wanted to leap into Pace’s life, shout praises, scream with joy. No, don't celebrate too early. Unbidden, her mind leapt over her reason and steamrolled her. ‘D-do you mean you’ve had it on pizza or are you talking about you’ve had it separately, because I know that Matt bloody well loathes it and if you haven’t had it he will kill me if you like it because then he’ll have to--’
 
Harley raised a hand. It was a smooth gesture, metal plates sliding against each other without a whisper of sound. Pace shut up.
 
‘I enjoy pineapple pizza,’ Harley stated. Their display blinked into amusement. ‘Mr Morner and I have had discussions on the topic.’
 
‘Oh. Peaceful ones?’ Because the talks with Matt she had were filled with shouting and screaming and “your taste buds suck.”
 
Harley’s display did not so much as twitch. ‘No. He threw a spanner at me once. He missed.’ The display blinked. Pace wasn't sure what changed. ‘I did not,’ Harley stated.
 
Huh. That did not sound safe.
 
‘He ok?’ Pace asked.
 
Harley’s display whirred into a frown, then back to neutral. ‘I see your misunderstanding. It was made of rubber.’
 
Wha…?
 
‘I'm lost,’ Pace said. She pressed a hand to the back of her neck. It felt warm with settling nerves. She was doing this! ‘But hey! Someone else who likes pineapple pizza here! Sweet, literally, so you'll talk to Matt and let me know when you want to hang?’
 
Harley moved again, this time to nod. Again, Pace didn't hear a sound.
 
‘That seems the best course of action,’ they said.
 
Pace nodded more times than necessary. ‘Ok! Great. See you… when I see you.’
 
Oh yes! Look at her, the master of diplomacy! The queen of romance! Yes! Whoo! She was amazing, take that nerves!
 
Before she reached the door, Harley’s voice halted her in her tracks.
 
‘What games do you have?’
 
Pace’s thoughts scrambled. Like eggs. Or jelly. Beaten and confused and mildly wary but mostly wobbly in excitement. ‘Oh um, I've GTA -- Grand Theft Auto -- and I got some old Zelda games. And when I say old, I mean old, like, the top down ones. Some more too. Matt’ll probably rummage through it all like a maniac beforehand, I can ask him to make a list for you. If there's any in particular you want to play, I could go buy a copy?’
 
The time it took for Harley to reply was achingly long. Did she do it wrong? Pace could feel her heartbeat in her neck, clutching to her in fear. Did she do it wrong?
 
‘That is fine,’ Harley said. Relief poured down like rain.
 
Then--
 
‘Thank you, ma’am.’
 
Oh.
 
Oh fuck, no, please.
 
Pace ruthlessly held onto her smile. No. Harley was not doing this because they're a robot -- they are Harley, they are Harley, don't think stupid things like that! Harley is Harley and Harley is amazing, and there's no way Pace is accidentally forcing Harley into this… right?
 
Her tongue was lead again.
 
‘O-oh. No… no problem,’ Pace forced out. ‘See you?’
 
Harley inclined their head in a nod.
 
Pace fled the room.



Word Count: 2,555
Time: 97 minutes (1:37)
Prompt 1: Crush Filter (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/CrushFilter)
In TV, one method to show that person A has a crush on person B is to switch to A's perspective and show B in an incredibly flattering light.
Prompt 2: Pinocchio Syndrome (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PinocchioSyndrome)
"I Just Want To Be Normal." But with Normal being Human. Sometimes this refers to humans that were forced into being something else, or the individual in question has never been human and just want to be.
By the way, the reason there are two is because A) I skipped over one prompt out and needed to make it up, and B) because I needed something other than Crush Filter for ideas.
Goals: Write romance.

Thoughts:
One of the main blots of advice writers toss out is “write what you know.” Another is “shamelessly steal from other writers,” but that isn't pertinent to this. The things I know have absolutely nothing to do with romance. I know zilch about it, and regularly have disdain towards the topic, especially if it is the sole thing holding up a work. I dislike romance as a literary device.
 
Naturally, that means I should practice writing it.
 
To that end, I ended up writing a dialogue-only script of 600 or so words (20 minutes), just to try and make it at least sound ok. I have no idea if I pulled off the romance or not, but hey, I ended up writing a metaphorical ton. I got dialogue practice, description + plot practice, and a good dash of writing a short story practice. I also greatly enjoy how I ruthlessly avoided using the phrase "Pace paced." =D

I did plan to write the same scene again, from Harley's perspective, but then the length grew very long.
Anyway, Next Time:
Please let this on actually be within my field of knowledge. Please.
Pep Talk Song (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PepTalkSong)
...Ok then.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on June 21, 2017, 10:29:55 PM
Oh hey, I'm still alive.

This was actually handwritten after my Linguistics exam. As another deviation from the norm, it's a poem.



Dunes's Plan

On starry eve when shadows leave
Their corners to dance and sing
They turn their eyes and shout goodbyes
To worries that they would bring
 
It’s moonlit now with dapper crown
The courts and the jesters pray
The sands are bright, filled with moonlight
No sunlight to scorch our way
 
Feel breezes clear the sparks of fear
Brought on by a morning’s scorn
See rabbits leap when others sleep
To wails of the new born
 
No need worry, fear filled scurry
Let those concerns turn astray
On banks of sand and endless land
Echoing back their dismay
 
The sands welcome all those undone
By pressures that they have forced
Join hand in hand amongst our plan
And we will shift history’s course
 
 


Word Count: Not really relevant, but it’s 122
Time: Between 7:15 PM and 8:15 PM... so an hour, even though I stopped and started a lot.
Prompt: Pep Talk Song (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PepTalkSong)
A song intended to encourage the listener.
Goals: I haven’t written a poem in a while. I did spend several weeks turning over what I could write when I had time to sit down and do so. I ended up with zero ideas.

Thoughts:
I only had pen and paper on me when I wrote this, so all the rhymes are fairly simplistic. I justified that via placing this song/poem squarely into the Sparks universe. Seriously, it needs a better name. I certainly fulfilled the prompt -- though I cheated again. I did a syllable count to ensure if someone did try to sing this, they wouldn’t stumble over how to pace things. Side note: When I tried humming, I somehow ended up with “Do You Hear The People Sing” references, which doesn’t even work because the count is all wrong. Part-way in my initial thoughts I did think "If this is set in the Sparks world, then I am going to make that sand seem nice." I am uncertain if I pulled that off.

Anyway, Next Time:
It's good to be back in this. Hopefully when I hit the random trope button, I get something nice. For once. Please.

Spreading Disaster Map Graphic  (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SpreadingDisasterMapGraphic)

Are you kidd-- this is a written medium!!

Edit: It just occurred to me that some people pronounce history as "Hiss - store - ee," while I've grown up saying "Hiss - tree" (effectively skipping the middle syllable, or merging it sufficiently to be unnoticed when I say it). Oops?
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: taulover on June 24, 2017, 09:04:33 PM
The meter (and the changing of it) is quite nice in that poem.
Edit: It just occurred to me that some people pronounce history as "Hiss - store - ee," while I've grown up saying "Hiss - tree" (effectively skipping the middle syllable, or merging it sufficiently to be unnoticed when I say it). Oops?
Solution (occasionally seen in song lyrics): hist'ry
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on July 08, 2017, 10:26:19 AM
Thanks, Tau.
Hmmmm but skipping the "o" would look messy (to me)! The horror! =P



This is unconnected from anything I've written on here, but I did borrow, transplant, and rename characters from a project of mine into this, because I am lazy.



Behind the cluttered table the door slammed shut.

Echoing across the hall were sharp snaps of sentences that shook the peeling wood walls; patters of panicked shoes; paper rustling; a squeak of fright from Pamela; a bark of a dog from outside, which soon turned into a flood of barks;  panic; calm; twitters from a battered bird cage held by tape and twine; and not a single sound paused as the door slammed shut. Finnley sure didn't look up, he didn't have the time. His fingers crossed the map, divider spinning from town to town alongside a ruler.

BANG.

Finnley jumped, drawing his hands back. A book had been slammed on the table, nearly hitting his hands and more importantly the map. Atop the book were familiar painted fingernails -- light purple, wherever she found the paint.

‘Checkers, what--’ he began.

‘Everyone shut up!’ Checkers roared.

All motion ceased.

Checkers tossed her hair over her shoulder. It looked matted. Was that blood? No, surely it was mud. ‘House meeting,’ she snapped. ‘Doll, shut your birds up.’

‘They're really, really bothered by the dents....’ Doll still obligingly picked up a dusty black sheet and carefully draped it over the cage. The birds’ song barely dimmed. Doll frowned at them, then her eyes lit up. ‘Oh! I could move them out to the hall if they're bothering anyone! Back in a sec!’

‘Doll--’

The door clicked shut after her. Checkers muttered something under her breath, palming her face. Finnley would put two cents on it being a swear or dosen.

‘Nobody else leave,’ she growled.

‘Can I have the table back?’ Finnley requested.

Checkers ignored him, and the book remained squarely on the map. She was too busy glaring everyone into gathering around the table. Pamela quietly took a chair and perched on its edge, while Copper stepped beside her and kept steady eyes on Checkers. Sonia silently groaned and dropped heavily to a crate, neatly cutting Charlie off. He fumbled, then stopped and stood where he started.

One who didn't move was Barbara. She kept tapping away at her ‘pad, locks of hair twisting a protective net around her.

‘Barbara, get over here,’ Checkers said crisply.

‘Fuck no.’

Babara, get over here now or so help me I'll put you on the watchman’s shift with Kapit.’

That got Barbara’s attention. By “attention,” Finnley meant “Barbara actually looked up.” It was at least a step in the right direction. Finnley inched his chair back from the table, hopefully out of the line of fire.

His map would be toast.

‘...Yeah, because that’d be an “optimal use of our resources,” wouldn't it,’ Barbara said. Her voice and expression twisted, drier than a corpse in the wastelands.

‘May we all, please, attempt to get along,’ Charlie boomed. He had his arms folded, head tilted towards the ceiling, and a smile that Finnley wasn't sure if he should take as a warning or genuine amusement. Charlie looked to Checkers and waved his hand. ‘You had an item of some importance to share, did you not? Speak, please, and we shall hear.’

Checkers shut her eyes for a moment, nodded, and stepped back from the table. She left the book on the map… argh, it was almost certainly torn from the force she'd leveled on it.

‘Where's everyone else?’ she said sharply at Pamela.

Pamela startled. ‘I don't know?’ she managed. ‘Taylor -- engine, Kapit, Simon… watch?’

‘Casey is with Taylor, as far as I am aware,’ Copper said. ‘Fletcher is still attempting to fix the rain collector, so he and Mike have been running from the deck to the engine room for advice. And... I believe Amber is recovering in her room with Iris.’

‘Fantastic,’ Checkers said dismissively. ‘Charlie, how are we going with food?’

‘We will need an additional supply run for water. Other than that, we are well equipped as of now, and will not need to touch ground until the end of next month.’ Charlie’s eyebrows had drawn together, mapping concern like an overbearing grandparent. ‘Checkers, is everything alright?’

‘It's fine.’

Finnley eyed her hands. They were shaking, and the air was not cold. When he looked back at her, he stifled a yelp. Checkers was glaring right between his eyes.

She held his gaze long enough to drill holes in his confidence, then turned back to the group. ‘What about ammunition? Do we have enough ammunition? Fuel?’

‘We're good for ninety eight days,’ Barbara called, her attention back on her ‘pad.

‘I cannot say the same,’ Copper said. Her fingers were twisting at the hem of her clothes, though her expression stayed as stoic as stone. ‘Bullets are near impossible to locate on our supply runs, furthermore--’

‘Find a way to make it,’ Checkers snapped. ‘Because after today, none of us are setting foot on the ground ever again.’

Outside, the dog was barking again.

‘...Come again?’ Finnley asked.

Checkers scowled. She grabbed the book, nearly tearing it from its spine, and threw it to a bookmarked page. The page didn't looks special. Her voice took on the familiar cadence of quotations. ‘ “Known commonly by the terms “blight” or “creeping blot,” the eighth curse of the dragons is the third deadliest currently known, and commonly characterised by how all areas infected with the curse becomes blacked, drained, and…” fuck this, basically, it's a dragon’s curse and it lasts for around twenty years. It spreads through physical contact. It doesn't get through water, but everything else turns into sludge.’

Abruptly, Checkers turned on her heel and strode to the wall. She leant against it, arms clasped at head height and cushioning her head.

Finnley slowly picked the book up, shifted it off the map, and carefully placed it. His hands shook. His heart was steadily playing in his ears, tapping on his chest in gulps.

‘...Fuck,’ Barbara said.

Huh. She had put her ‘pad down.

‘...Good thing Taylor had the airship,’ Barbara joked. The humour fell flat, bulldozed by the weight of worry.

Charlie had started flicking through the pages, eyes never pausing for longer than a moment. Without breaking his stride he said, ‘Have you informed the others, Checkers?’

Checkers did not respond.

‘I will,’ Pamela said. She slipped off her chair, hovering like she was about to fly away. ‘We done?’

Finnley looked back at the map. Back to the simple marks he had made, denoting each drop of melted land they had passed. So much for his job, if it all were fading.

‘Checkers,’ Charlie repeated. He looked up towards her. ‘We will survive. Pamela has her crops, and we can cross the ocean if the need arises. We will survive.’

‘Besides,’ Barbara said. ‘It's only the third most dangerous, right? Pssh, easy. Dragons don't know who they're messing with if they only go for third.’

Checkers… her shoulders had stiffened, though when Finnley didn't know. A moment later her arms dropped.

‘I'll tell them, Pamela. You all just--’ Checkers’s voice hitched, ‘--work on, everything. I'll keep looking through the library once e-everyone is informed. Goodbye.’

This time, the door did not slam shut. It only swung on the wishes of gravity; though, the click still cut through the hall with more force than the slam.



Word Count: 1,205
Time: I’m not sure.
Prompt: Spreading Disaster Map Graphic  (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SpreadingDisasterMapGraphic)
Used to show the effect of something on a wide scale. Map, plus expanding graphic superimposed on the map, equals something expanding across a landscape.
Goals: I wanted to practice/find these characters’ voices, especially as I only had vague character points so far. The names took some adjusting. Also I ended up shuffling most of the characters out of the room so I absolutely side-stepped this goal.

Thoughts:
Ew it got long
Heh, I had some fun with semicolons in the opening. Since I wanted to use characters I have (semi) established, it took me a good long time to get this functional. Namely the names -- the renaming sucked. In order to make my head hurt less, I decided to retain their first initial. Aaaaand then I discovered that I had far too many characters starting with "C." I swapped one out with a "K" instead. (Capital > Kapit).

Furthermore, I'm noticing a small problem. Namely how I'm finding it difficult to avoid this layout:

'Blah blah blah blah,' Character said.

Character did a thing. 'Blah blah blah.'

'Blah blah.'

'Blah blah blah blah!' Character did a thing.


And then it repeats solely following those patterns. I'm not so sure if it's as obvious as I think it is, but when I'm writing I end up following that format with disturbing frequency. Admittedly it's much easier to get on with the dialogue by doing that, but it feels repetitive and a wee bit like they're just talking heads. Welp, that's what editing is for!

That said, I did manage to pull off a scene. A character (Checkers) entered the scene with a goal (tell about thing), fulfilled the goal, then exited the scene to fulfill a new goal (tell others about thing) OR possible introspection and re-evaluation (Oh gods, we are all going to die/No, calm yourself). I can't take credit there since I did not plan that in the slightest, but hey, it happened.

Also this snip FINALLY gave me a way to distinguish Pamela from the other characters (Namely Taylor and Copper). Phew. That'll make life easier.
Anyway, Next Time:
Oh hey, that was my tenth snip. Sweet. As a celebration, I will allow myself one veto (that can't be transferred if I don't need it). Also, I should probably take a step away from the POV influencing the narrative, it's becoming far too great a crutch.

Self-Induced Allergic Reaction (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SelfInducedAllergicReaction)

...On one hand, I'm glad I got something fun. On the other, now I don't get to use my veto.
Title: Timed Prompts
Post by: Elbbsas on July 28, 2017, 08:36:30 AM
This story takes place in the Sparks universe. Maybe.



I once heard a story about the old man, who spends his days stepping from rock to rock. I would often sneak up to the towers to watch him. Step, step, step, my eyes would constantly follow his path. Would he stumble? I wondered. Would he fall, today? But, no. I never saw him fall. I spent day after day sneaking free from the Sands. I coughed and I cried and I wept until those around me sighed and stepped aside, but no matter how early I arrived or late I left I never saw him fall. I never saw him leave or appear. I would watch until he was swallowed by the darkness, and then be forced to retreat.

The story I heard about him was told to me long ago. It was a warning, a weapon, and a promise. I listened, and I hold it, as all of us were told to do.

What I was told was this.

Once, there wasn't a tower. Once, the tower we lived and breathed upon was just a rock. We were buried far below. We were still in the dark, our eyes bright from the light we sheltered. We were still children, too afraid to dare try. In that darkness and silence, we danced and we played with our fingertips full of flurry and flight. In that darkness and silence, we knew nothing.

Then the earth around us shook. Once, twice. Then it stilled. Nothing was thought of this, and when I learned of this I thought it strange. ‘Weren't they afraid?’ I asked. ‘The sands were collapsing!’

‘Hush,’ I was told, and the story continued.

Those who felt the earth shake stilled. But then, as nothing happened, they shrugged and went on. They danced, they played, they shared their flight.

‘They were fools,’ another said, when I heard the story. ‘The blasted fools should have left the damn cave, then we wouldn't be--’

‘Hush!’ they were told, louder than mine. ‘Don't be s-- silly. Stories have beginnings and ends, don't spoil it, dear.’

The other scoffed, but fell silent and listened.

Earthquakes continued. In the dark there was no day, nor night, nor dusk, nor dawn. Nothing was there to mark time’s passage -- if its passing was a concept we grasped. It kept on, who knows for how long.

‘Sand trackers? Wouldn't they know?’ someone asked.

‘Shut up,’ another said. ‘I want to listen.’

It kept on shaking. Then, as has happened many times since, the caves collapsed utop us.

‘Oh no!’

‘Did they survive?’

‘Don't be stupid, course they did! ‘Ow could we be here if they didn't?’

Many of us didn't survive, I was told. The sands are a heavy thing, so far above us. They crushed. They stole the air. Many of us, the sands took, and still take.

But a pocket of us lived, trapped, and were slower to fade. They were able to breathe. For the very first time, there was a hole to the sky.

When I was told this story, someone interrupted and asked how this was possible. They spat fact after fact, bitter and cold, and never let the teller have a word. I and others watched and drifted away, though the teller listened to each and every claim. I coughed and cried, and slipped away to the Great Tower, and the story had to be finished on a different day.

That was the first time that I noticed the man. Up in the tower, I watched the man walk. I stood on tiptoes and tried to see him as he passed far below. I did not know the story was about him, but I enjoyed the watch I found. He never looked up, but I looked down, and watched.

But the story continued, and taught me who he was.



Word Count: 638
Time: 36 minutes.
Prompt:  Self-Induced Allergic Reaction (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SelfInducedAllergicReaction)
Someone deliberately exposes themself to something they are allergic to.

Thoughts: I admit, it took me a good long while to get started on this one. Until about… an hour ago, I was thinking about trying my hand at Fred and George antics or something. I'm glad I opted against it, in the end.

...It now occurs to me that I tried to write a story with at least three time periods involved near-simultaneously. Hm. I'll need to read over it in the morning to see if it makes any sense. Oh, ouch, especially since I was very ambiguous with my personal pronouns up there. Oops. Also, looking over it I seem to have misplaced my tenses. Some things are in past tense when by all rights they should be present. (On the other hand I'm not absolutely certain if they are in the present or not). I'll take a look over it again if I continue this story branch.