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A while back, Laurentus suggested making Point Breeze and Reon Paragons, in addition to Colberius X.

Thoughts on bestowing the honor on PB? I did not know him very well, so others would need to provide reasons why.

yes I copy/pasted this from the other topic
Edit: typo in title

He was Jarl of Integration, right? He also was great at welcoming new members like myself.

Let me quote Amalya's Paragon act:

Title
1. This shall be titled the Amalya Paragon Act

Paragon Status and commendations
     The Storting recognizes the efforts that Amalya Meindhert has put into the betterment of Wintreath. Her efforts as the Jarl of Culture, including the establishment and running of the Chasing the American Dream roleplay, Wintreath Radio, and other contests and events have helped push Wintreath along into the beginning stages of prosperity and growth, and her influence is seen in practically every new cultural area that appears within the Region. We further recognize her service to this Storting as Speaker of the Fourth Underhusen.

    Through her time in the region, Amalya has been elevated to Countess because of her continued efforts and interest in the betterment of our region, and was named as Wintreath's first Citizen of the month by the Citizens of the region. However, her greatest impact on our community is through her friendliness, perseverance, loyalty, compassion, and openness that has made her such a friend and role model to so many here and made her an essential pillar of our community.

    And so it is with great enthusiasm that we, the Storting, commend Amalya for her efforts. We commend her for her services, loyalty, quality of work, and embodiment of the very values of Wintreath, and elevate her to the status of a Paragon in recognition.

The same pretty much holds true for PB. Even people in other regions remarked upon how friendly he was.

Also, I seem to recall him introducing some of the new methods for mentors that we used before he went and disappeared.

He was pretty on top of his game for a while as Jarl though.  I went back into some of our previous announcements, and even one of our previous JOI was called out by Moot on how bad it made him look when PB was doing everything and more in a a short time compared to the previous Jarl who couldn't even get things straight in a 41 day period.

Also, I seem to recall him introducing some of the new methods for mentors that we used before he went and disappeared.

He was pretty on top of his game for a while as Jarl though.  I went back into some of our previous announcements, and even one of our previous JOI was called out by Moot on how bad it made him look when PB was doing everything and more in a a short time compared to the previous Jarl who couldn't even get things straight in a 41 day period.

Stop making Laurentus and me look bad at our Cabinet job.

The onus is on us.

Title
1. This act shall be cited as the Point Breeze Paragon Act.

Recognition
2. Being an exemplary example of Wintreath spirit on an international scale
His outstanding work welcoming and fostering new members in Wintreath
His commendable dedication as a mentor to new Wintreans
For pioneering new and innovative methods in the Ministry of Integration
The dedication and commitment shown by Point Breeze for the betterment of Wintreath

3. Point Breeze is hereby elevated to the rank of Paragon.

So something like this?

First off, edited to be parallel in grammatical structure, and also more in line in formatting with existing laws. Also included his current username.

Title
1. This act shall be cited as the Point Breeze Paragon Act.

Recognition
2. Wintreath commends Point Breeze (PB) for:
(a) Being an exemplary example of Wintreath spirit on an international scale
(b) His outstanding work welcoming and fostering new members in Wintreath
(c) His commendable dedication as a mentor to new Wintreans
(d) Pioneering new and innovative methods as Jarl of Integration
(e) His dedication and commitment to the betterment of Wintreath

3. Point Breeze is hereby elevated to the rank of Paragon.

Would suggest splitting sections noting Point Breeze's accomplishments and recognizing the effects of his work, as was done in the Weissreich Paragon Act and Pengu Commendation Act.

Would also suggest adding in more concrete accomplishments, perhaps to complement the current ones in the draft as well.

Ok, sure! What were his concrete accomplishments?

Think he pretty much came up with the mentor system, didn't he?

He also wrote, and was involved with the writing of a shitload of laws.

Title
1. This act shall be cited as the Point Breeze Paragon Act.

Recognition
2. Wintreath commends Point Breeze (PB) for:
(a) Being an exemplary example of Wintreath spirit on an international scale
(b) His outstanding work welcoming and fostering new members in Wintreath
(c) His commendable dedication as a mentor to new Wintreans
(d) Pioneering new and innovative methods as Jarl of Integration
(e) His dedication and commitment to the betterment of Wintreath
(f) His outstanding contribution in the Underhusen

3. Point Breeze is hereby elevated to the rank of Paragon.

Title
1. This act shall be cited as the Point Breeze Paragon Act.

Recognition
2. Wintreath commends Point Breeze (PB) for:
(a) Being an exemplary example of Wintreath spirit on an international scale,
(b) Pioneering new and innovative methods as Jarl of Integration, singlehandedly creating and organizing the mentor system,
(c) His outstanding work welcoming and fostering new members in Wintreath,
(d) His commendable dedication as a mentor and leader of mentors to new Wintreans,
(e) His outstanding contribution in the Underhusen, including one term as Speaker pro tempore and authoring laws such as The Structural Amendments to the Underhusen Procedural Rules,
(f) His dedication and commitment to the betterment of Wintreath.

3. Point Breeze is hereby elevated to the rank of Paragon.

Edits:

• Bolded second subtitle
• Added commas to ends of each line to be more similar in structure to previous paragons/commendations
• Reordered list for organizational flow
• Added creation of mentor system
• Added specific actions as Skrifa (if someone has a better law that he wrote, please provide)

Think he pretty much came up with the mentor system, didn't he?

He also wrote, and was involved with the writing of a shitload of laws.

He developed the modern system that was used for Mentors for a while, including creating a complete Q&A for mentors to introduce themselves, and for new members to ask questions.

But I believe the original Mentor system was developed by the previous JoI

As to Tau's changes, I definitely approve.

Title
1. This act shall be cited as the Point Breeze Paragon Act.

Recognition
2. Wintreath commends Point Breeze (PB) for:
(a) Being an exemplary example of Wintreath spirit on an international scale,
(b) Pioneering new and innovative methods as Jarl of Integration, singlehandedly overhauling and organizing the mentor system,
(c) His outstanding work welcoming and fostering new members in Wintreath,
(d) His commendable dedication as a mentor and leader of mentors to new Wintreans,
(e) His outstanding contribution in the Underhusen, including one term as Speaker pro tempore and authoring laws such as The Structural Amendments to the Underhusen Procedural Rules,
(f) His dedication and commitment to the betterment of Wintreath.

3. Point Breeze is hereby elevated to the rank of Paragon.

Changed "creating" to "overhauling." Would that work better?

Looks excellent to me.