Topic: Grammar Fix of Wintreath (finally!)  (Read 157 times)

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Post #104253
August 20, 2017, 06:39:28 AM

I've recently presented 4 bills to the Underhusen for debate that have the goal of correcting the grammar in Wintrean Laws. I'll post it here too, as per my duty as Secretary of the Underhusen.

The Omnibus Constitutional Correction Amendment II
Title
1. This bill shall be cited as the Omnibus Constitutional Correction Amendment II.

Amendments to the Fundamental Laws of Wintreath
2. Article I Section 4 of the Fundamental Laws of Wintreath shall be amended to read:
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4. Upon the conclusion of the election, the Underhusen shall, under supervision of the Monarch, select a member of its own to preside over the Underhusen. Further procedure shall be declared in the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen.

3. Article I Section 12 of the Fundamental Laws of Wintreath shall be amended to read:
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12. The Storting shall have the authority to declare war upon another region or organization.

4. Article IV Section 9 of the Fundamental Laws of Wintreath shall be amended to read:
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9. The recall election shall compose of a forty-eight hour nomination period in which candidates may stand for election, followed by a seventy-two hour election period. The winner of the recall election shall assume the seat in question upon its conclusion.

Amendment to the Royal Titles and Styles Act
5. Section 8 of the Royal Titles and Styles Act shall be amended to read:
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8. The Preamble of the Fundamental Laws of Wintreath shall be amended to read as follows:
The Declassification Amendment Act II
Title
1. This bill shall be cited as the Declassification Amendment Act II.

Amendment to the Declassification Amendment Act
2. Section 3 of the Declassification Amendment Act shall be amended to read:
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3.  Section 4 shall be added to the Declassification of Private Storting Discussion Procedure Act, and it shall read:
"Any powers given to the Speaker or Chairman by this act will also be given to the Speaker Pro Tempore and Acting Chairman if they are empowered by their respective Procedural Rules.”
The Omnibus Statutory Law Correctional Amendment Act
Title
1. This bill shall be cited as the Omnibus Statutory Law Correctional Amendment Act.

Amendment to the Citizenship and Demonym Act
2. Section 3.1 of the Citizenship and Demonym Act shall be amended to read:
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3.1 The Storing shall have the authority to recognize any previous or current Citizen as a Paragon of Wintreath if it feels the individual was an essential member of the regional community, or performed invaluable service to the region, and/or otherwise embodied the principles, values, culture, or honour of the region.

Amendment to the Judicial Offices Act
3. Section 2.2 of the Judicial Offices Act shall be amended to read:
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2.2 The term of a judicial appointment lasts either the length of a case or a duration of 1 month from appointment, whichever comes first. At the end of the 1 month period, if the case is still being heard, it falls to the Monarch to reappoint members of the Storting to the Judiciary, or to the Speaker of the Underhusen and the Speaker of the Overhusen in the case of Monarchical absence.

Amendments to the Charax Romanov Act
4. Section 3.1 of the Charax Romanov Act shall be amended to read:
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3.1 Charax shall receive the Commendation of Wintreath for the following:

5. Section 3.1.1 of the Charax Romanov Act shall be amended to read:
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3.1.1 Running the Foreign Affairs Department

Amendment to the Code of Criminal Laws
6. Section 8 of the Code of Criminal Laws shall be amended to read:
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8. Statute of Limitation on this Act.

Amendment to the Definition of Public Act
7. Section 1 of the Definition of Public Act shall be amended to read:
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1. This shall be titled the Definition of Public Act.
The Omnibus Procedural Rules of the Underhusen Amendment XV
Title
1. This bill shall be cited as the Omnibus Procedural Rules of the Underhusen Amendment XV.

Amendments to the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen

2. Section 3(b) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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(b) A motion to Extend Debate may include a time period shorter or longer than 48 hours, but is not shorter than 4 hours and is not longer than 1 week. Should no time period be given or should the time period be shorter or longer than what is allowed, the extension shall be 48 hours. If little to no active discussion has happened by the deadline of the first extension, the ability to extend debate/discussion shall be relinquished and a Skrifa other than the Speaker must motion to vote or table the bill. Active discussion shall be defined as any debate or discussion on a bill or its merits with significant or productive contributions from a majority (50% or more) of Skrifa.

3. Section 5(c) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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(c) Abstain, indicating that the representative is voting neither in favor of nor against the proposal but wishes his or her vote to be recorded.

4. Section 10(c) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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(c) The Speaker may close a vote but leave the record open to allow other Skrifa to record their votes.  Votes cast after the vote has been closed will not affect the result of the vote.

5. Section 12(b) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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(b) The Speaker pro tempore, whenever he or she is presiding over the Underhusen, shall assume all of the responsibilities of the Speaker as listed in relevant law and shall be subject to the same constitutional and statutory restraints placed upon the Speaker.

6. Section 16(a) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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16. (a)The Speaker (or standing Speaker) may deem members of the Underhusen "inactive" if they are not present for a prolonged period of time; this status can be ignored if supplanted by either the "inactive" member stating they are no longer inactive in the Underhusen or by majority vote of all current Skrifa. This status must be noted and maintained in a public listing in the Underhusen.

7. Section 16(d) of the Procedural Rules of the Underhusen shall be amended to read:
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(d) If all Skrifa bar the Speaker (or standing Speaker) are deemed "inactive" then the session will be immediately suspended until either 1] The Skrifa return, or 2] The session ends. During this suspension, no proposals may be introduced, motioned on, or voted on in the Underhusen.
Now, you may discuss!
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    Post #104318
    August 20, 2017, 07:10:41 PM

    Link to earlier discussion for the lazy (like me)

    A suggestion: perhaps we could see a non-binding resolution passed encouraging the Monarchy and the Overhusen to make grammar fixes to their rules and decrees as well, since you've already gone through and found all the typos/grammatical errors?
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    I see no problem with this other than one thing.

    For 2. Section 3b, I'm not to keen on it having such vauge descriptions. What is considered "little" discussion or a "significant" or "productive" contribution?
    That's not a change from earlier wording. Unless I'm sorely mistaken, the point of this act is just to fix grammar errors, of which this is not one.
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    Post #109341
    October 01, 2017, 05:48:43 PM

    @Wintermoot will the constitutional amendments come up for referendum along with the Underhusen elections?
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    Post #109466
    October 02, 2017, 07:31:34 PM

    I forgot about them, tbh. v_v But yes, it's not too late to add them in.
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    Post #110127
    October 11, 2017, 04:52:51 PM

    ...And I just noticed a typo on one of the grammar laws. Godammit.
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    3.1 The Storing shall have the authority to recognize any previous or current Citizen as a Paragon of Wintreath if it feels the individual was an essential member of the regional community, or performed invaluable service to the region, and/or otherwise embodied the principles, values, culture, or honour of the region.
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    Wintreath:
    Citizen: 8 April 2015 - present
    From the Ashes RP Game Master: 29 November 2015 - present
    Skydande Vakt Marshal: 29 November 2015 - 28 February 2017
    Skrifa of the 13th Underhusen: 13 December 2015 - 8 February 2016
    RP Guild Councillor: 9 February 2016 - present
    Ambassador to Lovely: 23 February 2016 - 17 August 2016
    Werewolf VII co-host: 11 May 2016 - 5 June 2016
    Skrifa of the 18th Underhusen: 8 October 2016 - 7 December 2016
    Ambassador to Balder: 1 December 2016 - present
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    Ambassador to the INWU: 11 March 2017 - present
    Ambassador to the Versutian Federation: 18 August 2017 - present
    Thane of Integration: 29 September 2017 - present
    Speaker of the 24th Underhusen: 10 October 2017 - present

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    Plebeian: 16 April 2014 - 21 July 2014
    Patrician: 21 July 2014 - present
    Adeptus Mechanicus: 24 October 2014 - 16 November 2014
    Co-founder of New Hyperion: 29 October 2014 - present
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    Post #110129
    October 11, 2017, 05:34:46 PM

    ...And I just noticed a typo on one of the grammar laws. Godammit.
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    3.1 The Storing shall have the authority to recognize any previous or current Citizen as a Paragon of Wintreath if it feels the individual was an essential member of the regional community, or performed invaluable service to the region, and/or otherwise embodied the principles, values, culture, or honour of the region.

    That is the most ironic thing I've seen in my life xD
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    Post #110132
    October 11, 2017, 06:48:37 PM

    ...And I just noticed a typo on one of the grammar laws. Godammit.
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    3.1 The Storing shall have the authority to recognize any previous or current Citizen as a Paragon of Wintreath if it feels the individual was an essential member of the regional community, or performed invaluable service to the region, and/or otherwise embodied the principles, values, culture, or honour of the region.

    That is the most ironic thing I've seen in my life xD


    It could save others from grammar errors, but not itself.
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    Citizen: 8 April 2015 - present
    From the Ashes RP Game Master: 29 November 2015 - present
    Skydande Vakt Marshal: 29 November 2015 - 28 February 2017
    Skrifa of the 13th Underhusen: 13 December 2015 - 8 February 2016
    RP Guild Councillor: 9 February 2016 - present
    Ambassador to Lovely: 23 February 2016 - 17 August 2016
    Werewolf VII co-host: 11 May 2016 - 5 June 2016
    Skrifa of the 18th Underhusen: 8 October 2016 - 7 December 2016
    Ambassador to Balder: 1 December 2016 - present
    Skrifa of the 19th Underhusen: 7 December 2016 - 9 February 2017
    Ambassador to the INWU: 11 March 2017 - present
    Ambassador to the Versutian Federation: 18 August 2017 - present
    Thane of Integration: 29 September 2017 - present
    Speaker of the 24th Underhusen: 10 October 2017 - present

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    Plebeian: 16 April 2014 - 21 July 2014
    Patrician: 21 July 2014 - present
    Adeptus Mechanicus: 24 October 2014 - 16 November 2014
    Co-founder of New Hyperion: 29 October 2014 - present
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    Post #111033
    October 21, 2017, 05:10:49 AM

    So, in updating the laws page, I've noticed a few missing periods some laws. If possible, I ask @Mathyland to help me see if there are any other grammar errors.

    Statement of the Underhusen on the Events in Lazarus (missing period in 2.1)

    I also see quite a few missing periods in the Title section of not just recent laws (such as the Ainur Treaty repeal) but also earlier ones (such as the Charax Romanov Act) that seem to have gone unnoticed in the original grammar check.
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    From the Ashes RP Game Master: 29 November 2015 - present
    Skydande Vakt Marshal: 29 November 2015 - 28 February 2017
    Skrifa of the 13th Underhusen: 13 December 2015 - 8 February 2016
    RP Guild Councillor: 9 February 2016 - present
    Ambassador to Lovely: 23 February 2016 - 17 August 2016
    Werewolf VII co-host: 11 May 2016 - 5 June 2016
    Skrifa of the 18th Underhusen: 8 October 2016 - 7 December 2016
    Ambassador to Balder: 1 December 2016 - present
    Skrifa of the 19th Underhusen: 7 December 2016 - 9 February 2017
    Ambassador to the INWU: 11 March 2017 - present
    Ambassador to the Versutian Federation: 18 August 2017 - present
    Thane of Integration: 29 September 2017 - present
    Speaker of the 24th Underhusen: 10 October 2017 - present

    Aura Hyperia/New Hyperion:
    Plebeian: 16 April 2014 - 21 July 2014
    Patrician: 21 July 2014 - present
    Adeptus Mechanicus: 24 October 2014 - 16 November 2014
    Co-founder of New Hyperion: 29 October 2014 - present
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    Post #111316
    Today at 04:55:47 AM

    I think we have enough of these to create a "missing period in title clause amendment act." :P

    Laws with missing periods:
    Declassification of Private Storting Discussion Procedure Act
    Declassification Amendment Act
    The Repeal of the Treaty Between Wintreath and the People's Republic of Lazarus Act
    Repeal of the Treaty of Friendship with Ainur Act
    The Anti-NPO/NLO Citizenship Requirement Act (this one is even worse, though it also repealed, so I'm guessing that's why Mathy ignored it)
    Repeal of The Anti-NPO/NLO Act
    Amendment to the Citizenship and Demonym Act (hey we just passed this! why didn't we noticed this?)
    The Charax Romanov Act
    The Amalya Paragon Act
    The Underhusen Elections Clarification Act (hey we also just passed this!)
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    Wintreath:
    Citizen: 8 April 2015 - present
    From the Ashes RP Game Master: 29 November 2015 - present
    Skydande Vakt Marshal: 29 November 2015 - 28 February 2017
    Skrifa of the 13th Underhusen: 13 December 2015 - 8 February 2016
    RP Guild Councillor: 9 February 2016 - present
    Ambassador to Lovely: 23 February 2016 - 17 August 2016
    Werewolf VII co-host: 11 May 2016 - 5 June 2016
    Skrifa of the 18th Underhusen: 8 October 2016 - 7 December 2016
    Ambassador to Balder: 1 December 2016 - present
    Skrifa of the 19th Underhusen: 7 December 2016 - 9 February 2017
    Ambassador to the INWU: 11 March 2017 - present
    Ambassador to the Versutian Federation: 18 August 2017 - present
    Thane of Integration: 29 September 2017 - present
    Speaker of the 24th Underhusen: 10 October 2017 - present

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    Patrician: 21 July 2014 - present
    Adeptus Mechanicus: 24 October 2014 - 16 November 2014
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    Post #111317
    Today at 05:00:32 AM

    Also @Wintermoot we seem to have forgotten to put up the Declassification Amendment Act II for referendum.

    Unless the Declassification of Private Storting Discussion Procedure Act is actually Statutory Law that is misplaced on the laws page? (Upon further inspection, this appears to be the case; I do not see it undergoing referendum at any point.)
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    Wintreath:
    Citizen: 8 April 2015 - present
    From the Ashes RP Game Master: 29 November 2015 - present
    Skydande Vakt Marshal: 29 November 2015 - 28 February 2017
    Skrifa of the 13th Underhusen: 13 December 2015 - 8 February 2016
    RP Guild Councillor: 9 February 2016 - present
    Ambassador to Lovely: 23 February 2016 - 17 August 2016
    Werewolf VII co-host: 11 May 2016 - 5 June 2016
    Skrifa of the 18th Underhusen: 8 October 2016 - 7 December 2016
    Ambassador to Balder: 1 December 2016 - present
    Skrifa of the 19th Underhusen: 7 December 2016 - 9 February 2017
    Ambassador to the INWU: 11 March 2017 - present
    Ambassador to the Versutian Federation: 18 August 2017 - present
    Thane of Integration: 29 September 2017 - present
    Speaker of the 24th Underhusen: 10 October 2017 - present

    Aura Hyperia/New Hyperion:
    Plebeian: 16 April 2014 - 21 July 2014
    Patrician: 21 July 2014 - present
    Adeptus Mechanicus: 24 October 2014 - 16 November 2014
    Co-founder of New Hyperion: 29 October 2014 - present
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